This was perfect, but too short :-( I want to read the story about Tang Wan's healing ability. But such a cute story. Please read it!!! It is worth it.
I recommend this novel, no repetition, hooked until to the end. Normally you find that novels drags and lose the essence. Looking forward to updates
Oh my goodness, gracious, we are over 500 chapters in, and I haven't done a review. Someone crack a whip at me, make sure I do leave a review. Now to the good part. To whoever reads this... This novel will have you on the edge of your seat, desperately trying to escape the bad guys, fighting with our dearly loved Jolie and Lin Lin, laughing to tears as those two interact, bringing out the books to throw at who needs it the most, (I really like the idea of throwing the Unabridged Merriam Webster Dictionary). This book does more than entertain you. It brought me straight into the novel into the chapters, feeling the emotions and enthusiastic to the coming chapters. Our favored author never fails to entice me to read their books. I have loved each and every one of them. I do reread them when I need to. The emotions bring me joy when I do so. So I say give this book a chance, fall in love with the characters. Get to know the sassier side of my favorite AI.
RVN has done it again, now we have a mobster in a magic world, for now 43 chapters but I think this may be one of my new favorite novels. Thank you for this piece, it works, keep it up RVN
Really like the start of this story! It’ great to see something a bit unique in how the system works and I’ love to see how this story progresses. Hopefully it gets enough votes to continue
Hey , bro why are you not uploading chapters. You are writing good story continue many.I am waiting for new chapters,please post some
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ALLLLLLRIGHT, I just got to around to reading your fanfic. I have to say, it's definitely gotten a great story so far. I'm not judging based on spelling errors or mistakes (Being that 1. it's clearly understandable and 2. I'm sure I have some mistakes as well here and there), only the content and the other pieces itself. I would try and strive more towards going in your own direction with some things, I've noticed that you sometimes go with the MHA Anime/Manga and parallel it to Daiki and the others. Which honestly, isn't really a bad thing, it's always good to start somewhere and have a stable build up, even if you have to use some things from the story.The characters could use a little work, by that I mean have some chapters where you could possibly have them interact more with Daiki outside of the whole U.A. High setting (Exams, Fights, and such). Feel free to put your own spin on Daiki as well, do things that you haven't seen any other MHA Fanfic OC do yet! Another thing, I highly encourage that you don't use "Said" as often, unless need be of course, that way it can spice up your chapters! Again, I really would like to see more from some of the characters that are the most important besides Daiki! You've gotten quite a bit, but you've opened the surface on some really awesome character development for these characters.Also, don't be afraid to bring new things to the table! As long as you build them up and have them make sense, it'll go perfectly with your story! For example, the Tanjiro being Leonidus' Great Grandfather in my story, that shouldn't have made sense but having moments outside of the character helped it come together. I'd also recommend that you go back through previous chapters once you have the time and combine some of the sentences with each other, having paragraphs at LEAST 6 to 7 sentences (That aren't filled with action/fighting, then really about 10 to maybe even 12 are acceptable) makes it a bit easier for people to read. Speaking of that, also separating your spoken dialogue from the written dialogue helps out as well! All in all, this story has the potential to be amazing! I honestly love the direction you're going so far, but I really do recommend that you have fun with it, test things out that people may like or that people might not like. Take criticism (Like, actual well thought out, not like "Oh, this sucks, make this a Harem" or "Garbage... Daiki needs to be this and this..." and so on) and use it to improve your story as well. As long as that criticism is valuable, actually pointing out flaws instead of calling it garbage and leaving it at that, you can use that to your upmost advantage. And the obvious, go through your chapters and correct spelling mistakes and what not. Other than that, I personally love this story so far and can't wait to see where you take this! Keep on writing, don't push yourself to put out chapters everyday either, just go at your own pace!
Absolutely amazing start! Benoit is such an amazing MC and the story is unique in its own right. The pacing of the story is great and everything isn’t just thrown at you. Spelling grammar and pacing are exceptionally written and it draws you in and keeps you hooked!
I really liked the concept behind the story overall and I think now I am addicted to this novel.The author of this novel Jashin just making a great job actually.I wonder what is going to happen in next chapters its giving me goosebumps in every chapters.Overall 5/5 stay tunned for next chapters :)
I've had it with these Chinese nationalist scum. China may or may not be a good country, but some of its people need to be rehabilitated.Sick of this sh*te.
Every hole is a goal.