I see that you choose Zero from Drakengard 3 for the cover, which is one of my favorite game… This is why I will read your story aha
the story is good but you need to show the damage the main character gave or received grs dj iş güç CSS Ziya dj iş ayı ha ay karlı sıkça ak lan karı iş
This was amazing I loved the story development, world bulilding, and the writing, I loved literally everything about it, out of all the game novels i have read this is the best one
This needs an editor. The story is interesting to me, but the writing quality is low. Edit the story for consistency, grammar, and spelling. Make an appendix with the power levels, so people can look a that before the chapter where the MC explains the power levels to her new students.Also the people other than the MC will need descriptions. Names, ages, gender and power levels are all that is discussed. In order to keep track of characters I need more than that to visualize them. Otherwise the names just blur together and I can't differentiate them.
Bad translation and bad writting. Don't waste your time here. ..............................................................................
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the ranking system is needlessly complicated, you could have put the same type of rankings in most of the things but it's uselessly multiplied. I have to repeatedly go to the auxiliary chapter to make sure which ranking this is so 3 star on world background for that. I actually wanted to give 2 star at first but considering you are a new author and all.... well 140 words are over long ago
First three chapters named prelude show MC being a spiteful youth, seem to have upset other readers. However main story starts after this and he’s now calmer but still devious.Background settings of the story appears to be some derivative of the Heroes of Might and Magic universe.
Having read a sample of chapters, it's safe to conclude that this story tries too hard to do too many things at the same time.Here's some of the gamut of tropes that the author tried to squeeze into his story:1. Having an unknown love child2. Conveniently having said love child's mother dead3. Having a new "stepmother" for said love child. 4. Introducing vr elements as a major component of the story5. Introducing corporate politics. 6. Introducing crime/mafia elements into this story. 7. Trying to include humorous elements. I could go on and on. My advice for the author is that while it's great that you're inspired by various ideas, it's more important for a newbie ******* writer to write his first story with as small a scope as possible. Frankly, even bestselling authors like Butcher will struggle and fail at incorporating all the elements in this story. I mean VR plus corporate politics plus crime/mafia? This could be three standalone novels rather than just one.This is without mentioning the terrible prose/dialogue and cardboard characters. I see that the author has written about 200 chapters of this dross. My advice is to take this current story as a learning project and start over with a brand new idea.
This novel is pure gold with it I got A grade in all my classes, thanks you Qidian.All you plebs must be grateful to them...vgjneqigneignegioqegn
With an 8.8 rating for the untranslated version, this should have won out of the 8 options we had weeks ago. I think people aren't giving it a chance because it's last in the list and the cover isn't as swaggy as others. Looking forward to it.
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