It's a good story, quite unique. There are many secrets in the game. But sadly, the plot is a bit slow, but that doesn't matter either. Mainly steady.
I usually almost never read the video games genre. But I found this story development very fascinating. It has a solid flow and I've taken quite a liking to the MC. The grammar and the readability is also impeccable. Keep up the good work!
Full of plotholes. MC discovered a hidden quest that billions of others did not over a century. This quest was in plain site. I mean, look at all the speedrun of any games out there, people find out everything. Novel story drop terribly when the story moved into being a harem. It's basically him finding more girls to bang. Girls that fall for him are one dimensional. Follows the "he's nice to me, he seem confident and powerful" trope. When I said bang, I wasn't exaggerating.
Very poor buildup. Rushed beyond compare and nothing is explained. A totally unreliable NEET MC dies from Weebing too hard apparently, and then becomes reliable, able to kill, smart, and good with girls after he transmigrates. He is the polar opposite of the previous body’s owner, and does multiple things totally out of character. It’s an interesting story design, but the execution is just garbage. I was hooked and spent about an hour or two reading more than I planned, but I kept cringing at the sudden unexplained changes and finally couldn’t handle any more.Points for the storyNone for the design
Guys I checked out the CN site, the novel is highly recommended and is rated more highly than Ze Tian Ji, the author's most popular work among the Translation community. I suppose this is a novel worth your precious votes.
Can't understand why so many people voted for this. It's just another retarded story about stupid pervert ish situations.From the beginning humor is retarded: how can woman walk into plains to urinate on dead/sleeping person? And even more, how can she call him pervert?Typical Japanese ecchi cliche.
I believe it’s 10/10. It’s a masterpiece that you have to read. The first around 50 chapters are a little slow, but it just takes time for world building and to develop a care for the characters. After that the story develops in an outstanding manner, I can’t get into detail without using spoilers. It’s worth a try and I only regret that I finished the novel because I can’t read anymore of it.
Great story, top quality translation, hilariously shameless MC. My first and favourite Chinese translated novel. Which I read on wuxiaworld. READ FOR FREE ON WUXIAWORLD WHERE IT WAS ORIGINALLY TRANSLATED AND WHERE QI STOLE IT FROM!!!
The story is a pretty good reincarnation Xianxia. The MC wasn't too OP in his past life and doesn't have all the answers straight from the get go, but it's still pretty fast cultivation wise, strinking a good balance in my opinion.Sadly this novel is plagued by sub-par translation Quality, probably machine translated and edited afterwards. Updating stability is OK, but this still drags it from a 4 to a 3.4.
* — Need to work.** — Not bad*** — Satisfying**** —Excellent***** — The best Webnovel can offer.---- Note: Don’t mind the grammar, I’m in hurry, so.Writing Style — I will assume the author is not Native English base on the writing. Tense, comma, filler words, and dots are out of place. Furthermore, the Author likes to switch words for some reason. Sometimes, confusing to read. But still a readable novel — 3.5 / 5Story Development — Pretty much decent. After he reincarnated back in time, the plot moves right after. However, to my opinion, the plot is just too fast. In one chapter, the mc meets a Core Member of this organization called ‘God’s Legion’, which will become terrifying in the future according to the author. Despite the Author telling us God’s Legion is scary, the members aren’t, at least from what I’ve seen when he meets one of the members.The Author even bothers to fed us information about this guy telling us that he was scheming and Mc suffered ambush from him bla bla bla, but then died few chapters after his appearance.Is this really the scheming and crafty Fang Chen? Hell, he even looks at the Mc with arrogance when he saw him. If I was scheming and crafty, I would approach the Mc, befriend him, and know about his background and such as after acting. But what did I see? Author telling us Scheming Person yet instead portrait the usual ‘Stupid Arrogant Young Master Fang’. Show not tell. Telling us is like promising us such character but showing is portraying us that character. Instead of telling us ‘He is Scheming’, show us what made him ‘Scheming’.Also, Fang Chen is a future member and strategies of God’s legion, thus killing him after his appearance would affect the entire plot. By killing such a character, it made him irrelevant to the story. Take note, God’s Legion would be the hurdle the protagonist has to overcome in the story. This kind of hurdle, God’s Legion Members should be relevant to the plot and should appear with decent intellect. As for Fang Chen? Meh, he’s not. Foolish and stupid. I even doubt if he really was a Member of this so-called God’s Legion.Also as a reader, I wouldn’t care about such information if this guy would die a few chapters later or held no importance to the story.As for plot holes, I notice lots of them. For instance, the Mc was able to obtain Kill Points by absorbing Pills. Take note, pills have different grading and their effects also differ from the grade. So by telling us experience gain from pills is base on Mc’s luck makes no sense. But let’s not talk about that. Back to the point, ‘Kill’ basically means to slay and slaughter any living creature. However, gaining ‘Kill Points’ from absorbing Pills is an error and violation of the rule laid by you, Author. By writing ‘Kill Points’ instead of ‘Experience’ means you set the rule for the protagonist leveling through slaughter. But in this case, you show us Mc gaining Kill Points from Absorbing Qi which is a no-no.For other plot holes, it will consume time explaining, so I will leave it in the hand of the Author to find those. For this, I will rate 3/5, on account I didn’t read all over the chapters available. Who knows the others might appear not too stupid and Plot Holes might not Plot Holes in the first place.Character Design — As for the other characters, though lacking, let’s not talk about it. Let’s focus on the Protagonist. TLDR; No Changes! Details: He died from fighting and ambush in his previous life, which I thought the protagonist would be cunning and cautious after experiencing that event. However, there are no changes at all. After arriving in the Lower Realm, all he did was act arrogant and stupid. By basically sitting in the center of a Restaurant, no doubt will attract attention. Bang! It did attract attention. Furthermore, it was a notable figure of the younger generation. The younger generation also wants to sit where Mc was sitting?!?! Coincidence? Or Forced Plot?... And guess what happened? Mc held him in contempt, sneering, and provoking him for no reason. Also, showing off wealth in the restaurant? Isn’t that basically attracting attention? Didn’t he die from being careless in his previous life? No matter where he is, even in the place of weakest, he should have been cautious. Why now gaining a second chance, he still a stupid, usual stereotypes xianxia protagonist. For this, I will rate 2/5. Need to polish more.Update Stability — 5/5. No need to explain.World Background — Author feeding us info dumps. Most of the paragraphs I read in a chapter mostly contains info. Info. Info. And Info. For having a good concept, I’ll rate it — 3.5/5.
Update your book. I am literally craving for more of this work. . .
Shameless author review. The plot is a really planned one. Do note that I’m still 14 years old and therefore busy with school, so I can’t upload consistently. Every chapters is average 1.2k words. My writing quality is the main thing I want to improve for the time being. That’s why I want you all to write a critic about my grammar or choices of words or my descriptive texts and dialogues, I know that there’s at least 20 faults and it would be greatly valued, if you write a critic. Thank you. Enjoy!