So far, everything has been good. There is no problems that I will nitpick on, the time is not quite ripe yet for a review since there has been only 6 chapters so far, but since the author has requested for it, I have shown up, I am not able to give a definite score because of the low amount of chapters to review but I would definitely keep this in my Library as long as it doesn't drop in performance.
I need raw... does somebody have raw?..............................................................................................................
I gotta say that this novel’s logic is a mess.
Dear Author.you have done a amazing job on this book. and I have few complaints. but I will give you this tip.actions speak louder than words.what i mean by this is simple, all of you writing has to be clear. If a reader even for a second gets confused it can become very hard to get back on track. for example this is from you story."stop talking about them!" Ryker suddenly react and walk out. there are several problems here but, the most glaring one is lack of context. How did he react? was it sadly, or was he mad? or could he just be annoyed. if you can start putting emotions into you characters you create a emotional connection between your characters and your readers. and if your readers are emotionally attracted to the story they will read to find out more about the characters they love.what I'm trying to say is that this story. no matter how good the plot is you will never make me cry. you will never make me want the protagonist to win. you will never touch me deep down. sorry for being blunt but it's true. look writing isn't easy. but if you don't look after the little details you book WILL die. I love this story and hate to see that before it had a chance. for some additional help watch overly sarcastic products' trope talks they are so help full. (I would watch the one about Mary sue first)again sorry for being blunt it's late at night and I can barely type so this will have many mistakes in the text deal with it. please
One of the best stories I've read. Epically gripping writing. Great translation. Great action scenes. Very well written characters. This is easily my favourite novel I've read on this site. Can't believe it's not more highly rated.
Has this been dropped hopefully not Cuz i really injoyed this
one of the shitiest dumbest and stupidest story i have ever read. i couldn't even read the first 2 chapters. not only the interaction between the mc and the girl stupid, they say shit like ill be your most caring sister in the next life. bitch you falsely acused him of raping you and crippling him and now you say that shit? im done and anyone that actually likes this brainless story is a fucking retard.
Such a great book. I always fear reading Chinese novels because of the amount of over done cliches, arrogant young masters, borderline rape, and all those harem nonsense, but this novel has made me a believer again. I know believe that there's still hope for Chinese novelsBRAVO??????????????
The world building and the character were good at first but.... the mc has became a bit bloodthirsty.... there was something unique about him when even though he was a beast he acted more rationally but now killing entire city just because for entertainment feels too much beast like.. yea he is a beast but acting too much beast like is not something I would prefer. He most of the times spare other beasts and most of the times kills other humans makes it feel a bit strange now as if his character is not very stable.
Just found out after reading the raw, in the raw the country the story happened in was in China, and most of the characters and companies are Chinese. The translator changed everything to American, the story happened in America, the characters and companies are American.
The premise of the story is very interesting! I’m loving the main character so far. There aren’t many chapters but the author has a creative way in stringing the world together.The author has a great usage of vocabulary and isn’t too repetitive. They’re grammar is also better than most writers on webnovel as well. Although the average grammar on webnovel is already bad to begin with so it probably isn’t saying much. Your grammar is good, but not great. Your good use of vocabulary helps immensely and didn’t tire me out which is a plus.My biggest issue is the long sentences. Areas where you could hv put a fullstop, is immediately continued with a another sentence. A whole paragraph could be one long sentence. I could hardly remember what I just read.It’s better to cut down some sentences short. Long sentences are not always better. Sometimes short sentences give more impact.Also, the average reader can only remember up to 6-7 words, 10 at most. And as you get better, it increases. However, the average reader on webnovel aren’t even native english, let alone very focused. So putting fullstops when needed should be taken into account.
what is the Chinese name of this story ?