very good, It's rare to find a book like this, raw please ?
Well a story about beast tamer and his beast girls.... And how he cultivate with them...~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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I want to give this novel a good review, but I can't really do that. I refuse to pad my review to make someone feel better.Author, your premise is decent. I can clearly see from the dialogue that you have a plot planned and there's a deep story being written.The problem that I'm having is that there isn't enough. At some point between conceptualization and actualization your story falls short. We can clearly tell that there's a story behind all the numbers that you want to invent, but the story isn't coming through well enough.While reading this novel, I felt like I was in a cellphone with spotty service. Sometimes it would be there, and other times it would be missing.You're not transitioning your thought processes enough to allow the story to flow properly. It's all jerky and uncoordinated.I feel like for every two or three plot devices, there's only half or less than half of the amount of world building that's required being put in. Sometimes your characters introduce things with zero Segway into them. No build up, no explanation.It's a random thing throw into the middle of a scene that is supposedly used to transition into another scene, the problem is that there's no transition. It feels shoddy.
great story and read i would recommend it I am not a fan of that whole thing with Travis also if you read this I think it would be cool if you did a book on Travis without the heros coming in the picture
I must say your writing is among one of the best I have ever read. The way you slowly describe the situation and normal conversation between the character is so refreshing. The story is good so far too. I would love to read more. keep up the good work. .
i can't find the raw in mtl.
While a lot of it has been done before, its done well. Would recommend giving this a try. Its an OP protagonist and all that entails. So 10 out of 10 for this
Enjoyable, thanks for the work ?Slower paced while still keeping my ADHD brain invested and interested in reading.Exciting in a chill way that keeps you looking forward to the next chapter.I just hope you'll continue the series and keep the regular updates in the future.
First off, the title is very deceptive. The Author used the term 'Dragonborn' to draw in people thinking it'd be linked to The Elder Scrolls.It isn't. It's a sh*tty cliche ridden story with as much creativity and depth to it as a five year old's crayon drawing.The Protagonist is a insufferable fool with no spine, there is no proper world building or background AT ALL, and it uses so many tropes that if this novel were a building it would be foreclosed then bulldozed.One of the examples is how the protagonist supposedly was fighting on the front lines against the Elves for five years, witnessing the deaths of many friends and fellow humans but he fell in love at first sight with a Elven Princess from the race that murdered millions of Humans in an unprovoked war of aggression.Not only that but the Princess of the Elves somehow knew that he was the system user, teleported to him then then betrayed her race by telling him about an upcoming attack on that city simply because she felt his magic dragon transformation due to her super special secret talent and desperarely wanted his dragon c*ck-*cough* I mean dragon magic.Even worse is how Erend is STILL an incompetant coward that shakes in his boots and freezes up when the Elves attack after five years of fighting on the frontline. He even gets shouted at to remind him to shoot at the enemy in the first chapter!2/5 Stars.
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I usually never review books or webnovels, but this is one that I just can’t ignore. One of my favorite webnovels of all time. This particular author has some of the best works out there. This, DD, and GAB are very well made and just keep pulling you in for more. Very interesting lore and world building as well as power systems. My favorite is probably Dimensional Descent, it keeps you on your feet and is always changing, but it never feels forced. This book as well. I highly reccomend this book.