So inconsistent. The author keeps on contradicting themselves with their own words and many things make no sense. I kept on reading it because I thought 'At least this isn't as inconsistent as The Flash,' but then it became as inconsistent as The Flash. For example, why does the MC not do anything at all to help defeat the monsters when he's so overpowered and nice? And the Evil Heart has a duration that has to end before it gets reactivated, yet the author insists that the duration will never end?
h. h. u . h
It’s a new work but it’s got me hooked! Great writing quality and interesting setting thus far, the authors humor shines through and the first chapter after the prologue was perfect ? the main character has very relatable interactions with the other characters and it feels very grounded and thought out work so far. I’m looking foreword to more!
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To anyone else reading this,You just need to read the first chapter, which only just takes about 2-5 minute of your time and then you can decide whatever you should contuine. personally suggest you read at least chapter 1. I know i shouldnt judge a book base one chapter but first chapter hook me in. reading the book didnt get me bore and i know i wanst bore reading it because i summazie the chapter.I suggest adding a picture so that people seeing it wont irgone it.
Overview TL;DR : A mediocre story with bad characterizationYou know how you're reading a story and you like the elements in it like intrigue, super powers, progression, unique world, etc.... But there's something that's just off... about the story?You, like I were probably missing proper character design and development. And none suffer more than the Main Character himself Quinn. After reading 276 chapters, all I can say about his personality is has a "strong spirit" and that's only because the author specifically said so. What's even more interesting is while being a orphan and bullied for probably his entire life, he has no social defects.Any other author who written a orphan character would build them up to have specific attributes like: incredibly isolated, irritable, vengeful, resourceful, or cunning due to circumstances. MC himself has circumstances that could characterize him (elaborating would enter spoiler territory for the first chapters) but the author doesn't uses it to define him.Even other characters have more defined characterization than him. One of them acts in a flippant manner, another has a passion for a certain subject. Man, even a character I hated has his own interests. As for MC, you couldn't even tell me if he likes anything specifically.Really it's all about characters. The author is bad at characterization, like describing the way he uniquely acts or behaves, or adding character defining moments that demonstrates the type of person they are. This is what ruins a novel, making the readers not care about the characters.A better reviewer might focus on the other problems of the novel (e.g. bad antagonists) but what I wanted to focus on was this as it's something that if not improved, the author will only produce half-baked stories.
Idk why people are shitting on the novel. It's decent; the MC may be a tad lacking in machismo manner, but the whole premise is him getting rewarded by pampering his alcoholic master. He isn't being hurt, nor degraded, so I wouldn't tag the MC as a masochist. It's decent, and I'd like to see it pass.
Listen, if your new to webnovel and like isekai than this novel is for you, but tbh the plot and cliches in the book is like a copy and paste of every other isekai be it novel, manga, or anime. So for experienced readers who are sick of the same plot outline then steer clear and save yourselves the lost time. Now feedback for author San, not bad at all for the novel, it was kinda rushed at the beginning and felt slightly forced, but everything connected and the flow of speech and storyline made sense so congrats on that. (Plz dont use the typical isekai plot template for a novel ever again, although the loli is not a bad idea and attracts more readers you gotta be careful that it doesn't transform into a typical oversaturated plotline)
Great sci-fi novel with really good background world building. Everything flows smoothly and is very interesting. I feel that this novel has very good potential in the later chapters, very good, don't want to spoil though, read for yourself.
Only a few chaps are out so I cannot give constructive feedback. Nevertheless, interesting story. There are little to no grammatical errors. The character design also seems good so far. The story has potential and I can't wait to see what the author will give us. Still, I suggest the author not using unfamiliar words like 'tuk-tuk' and work on the world background.
superb novel i also read this novel the character are so funny . waiting for next update and update continue as possible . i like this novel
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