Volumes1:Secret of Ori - Reviews

Hey ? all. i will be starting to write 1k+ words from now on so maybe the chalter rekeased per day will reduce from 2 to 1. i hope you wont understand.

I really enjoyed his book. It is refreshing to have an MC that doesn't feel the need to save everyone, and I like how they have inner turmoil a lot. In autumn fall school I feel like a lot of the characters are going to be disposed of very quickly. You do focus on the main characters (I'd say Jaime, Lyra, max and brie) but characters such as Richard, Tory and the cat girl are going to be thrown away or a running gig. Like it seems that Richard could be just a pervet, no character development, although it is unlikely. Whilst girl I feel is very important, yet will still be a running gig. I could be completely wrong here, so sorry if I am.

I liked the first 60 chapters so I deign to search and continue reading, it has quite a few chapters focused on the real life of the players and the GM, I read a few of those but they are quite heavy and boring to read so I decided to skip to those kinds of chapters, you know the typical, stop reading in the part where you decide to help the Chinese to form extraordinary people, since it seems to focus even less on the "game"The author has not updated in 2 months, so be careful, remember that with the new slave policies they have there it may not be updated or they end it suddenly

Just read the synopsis, and I have added this story for review under my own collection of criticism.The synopsis has many inconsistencies that hopefully will be addressed in the actual novel, but if not, I shall point them out in my own book.

1. I got a dig bick 2. You that read wrong 3. You read it wrong also 4. You checked 5. You smiled 7. You are wondering why you still reading this8. You see the mistake right? (on7)10. But did you see I skipped number 6?10. You checked 11. And saw I doubled number 10 and skipped number 913. And did you see I skipped number 2 14. You got tricked 15. But did you see that I skipped number 12 16. You checked and wandered why am I wasting my time on this.( You got tricked )

I ve read to chapter 12 and skipped to some further chapters and honestly I'm quite frustrated. What's the point of having a 'first life' and reincarnating in this novel. It feels like it's put there for the sake of having the word 'reincarnation' in the tags, we hardly get to see the Mc's feelings or ambitions from his previous life, what are his regrets? What's moral and immoral for him? There's a reason why most of these novels spend a great deal at building the mc's backstory. I'm pretty the author would  explore the mc's personality further in future chapters using flashbacks or whatever, but at that point people would stop caring about his previous life

The book has the potential. When reading i found not much miatakes but its like no description of Igor and Massie which should have been in the First chapter. I love it by the way....

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Vault Keeper Wang nodded.

The shower was on and I watched her shower. The hot water was steamy, and I could barely see it right, but its shape was still clear and it stirred me.

"Ah ~~ We got burned ... But, well, we'll make up for the next game!" I said