The Flames Within - Reviews

Cool begining with a promising future, and relatable characters that make the story belivable.   
I hope it continued to improve over time :]

Hello and an honest review from me. One thing I wanted to point out is you may try to break down the long paragraphs and I suggest you to separate the dialogues so the readers could read your book comfortably

Even though I'm not a huge fan of this genre, the story's premise seemed intriguing and unusual. I'm hoping it performs as well as the other chapters. expecting more.
Apart from that, the plot looks to have some promise. I'll keep an eye on it while keeping it in my back pocket to see if anything changes. It's not, however, my cup of tea.
I recommend it to anyone who is interested in this genre. The story is compelling and shows promise. It may be delivered in a more potent way.

The book is good and the story is also good. It takes a lot of hard work to write a book, I know it because I am also a writer.

You should write like this it will make it easier to read.

"Hi, are you new here," the girl asks.

"no, I have been working here for over a year now," the boy said.
It should be like this.

Interesting story, love the progression. It takes a lot of imagination and creative to write a virtual story. Need to write more chapters though

It is a nice story . The author has written it well.

I loved how the book started off with a dream, the comedy is good and the writing style is easy to understand, I never read books like these but trust me this book captured my attention, great work, looking forward to more chapters ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️

Okay, so while the story was a little slow to start, by chapter 3 things started to interesting. The characters and realistic as are there interactions.

This story does have a lot of potential, it is just that the grammar mistakes make it a little hard to read.

Anyway, good job author.

Superpowers and suspense, oh boy.  I am liking this already.  I've got to see what happens to Luis.  This is a great book. I recommend reading it.

The thing which I liked the most about this novel is it's dialogues. There are lots of hilarious jokes and sarcasm inside plus even the neutral conversation seemed real, like one would actually talk like that in real life. The flow is smooth to read.
Some editing definitely needs to be done, but for a new author this is a job well done.
My favourite character as of now have been Stephan since he's so jolly and friendly.

Alright! Here’s my honest review on this story:

In the first chapter, the spacing of the paragraphs sentences was horrible. But this gets fixed almost immediately in the chapters after that and I suprisingly didn’t see any flaws after that initial first chapter.

I can say the characters seem interesting along with believable interactions in most scenes. Some people might believe the characters to be stupid, but they are just teenagers in the story at the moment. So them being stupid is very normal. Especially in the beginning.

Currently, when writing this review, there is only 6 chapters released. Because of that, I haven’t seen enough of the story to know if there’s proper pacing or story development.

Also, there needs to be more regular updates. At least for the first 20-30 chapters.

This is the end of my honest review.