Supreme Origin: Time King - Reviews

There is no pacing at all in this novel. One minute we are in a scene, the next, it jumps 4 months later or a couple weeks later. It's just not good. Time jumps are all well and good if they are done right...this..this is not done right.

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the story focuses on the girl sticking to the main character, and its a burden to the main character, i had enough of it so i'm dropping this.

so far everything is good but the is one small problem maybe i did not notice it but the seem to be very little information about the cultivation path, i figure moral is warrior spiritual is a mage as for divine could it be with occupation plus a divine ability or something like that? maybe i am wrong.  but other that that good book, cant wait for the next update.

The plot is interesting but I find the characters childish and gullible.  The grammar is also very horrendous and this is the worst part.  Although the story is interesting, the grammar is really annoying and worsens the story, even if I’m able to read it.

Grammer is terrible idk why people said the authors english was good, this is torture just can't stand it. Story is ok if cliche but feels forced when author breaks the 4th wall all the time.

Hey author, please stop skipping time. I'm getting stupid just by reading. Plus could you write the tiers or stage of cultivation in a way we can understand Thank love you

Very underrated and unappreciated..

A great book. Apparently many just decided to ride on the hate train.

Stupid story, terrible grammar, reading it equal to torturing yourself. Plus mix up storyline even i dont know whats happening. Overall garbage novel. I mean the point of writing a novel is to let your reader understand what you are writing, the emotion behind it but this **** is useless. I try to force myself reading it but i gave up until chapter 56.

A funny use of the norse mythology and the others with a fast pacing rather nice if compared with many other novels way too slow in a rather complicated world where gods, magic and cultivation are mixed
Though you really need an editor to correct the mistakes because sometimes it can be hard to understand what you mean, I also saw that you repeated some sentences twice on some chapters. So an editor could help you correct what maybe you won't see when doing it yourself (don't forget that your readers will be happy to help you if you need us for that).
And also it's only my opinion but 6 and 10 years old is kind of too young for what happens to them even if they are more mature or grown up.
Keep going and good luck Mr/Ms Author

the author should get an editor to correct the grammar and english.

overall story setting seems good

And the cultivation ranking..... just love it

Thnaks for the novel