Supreme Origin: Time King

There is no pacing at all in this novel. One minute we are in a scene, the next, it jumps 4 months later or a couple weeks later. It's just not good. Time jumps are all well and good if they are done right...this..this is not done right.

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the story focuses on the girl sticking to the main character, and its a burden to the main character, i had enough of it so i'm dropping this.

so far everything is good but the is one small problem maybe i did not notice it but the seem to be very little information about the cultivation path, i figure moral is warrior spiritual is a mage as for divine could it be with occupation plus a divine ability or something like that? maybe i am wrong.  but other that that good book, cant wait for the next update.

The plot is interesting but I find the characters childish and gullible.  The grammar is also very horrendous and this is the worst part.  Although the story is interesting, the grammar is really annoying and worsens the story, even if I’m able to read it.

Grammer is terrible idk why people said the authors english was good, this is torture just can't stand it. Story is ok if cliche but feels forced when author breaks the 4th wall all the time.