Hey, got to say that this is a good novel. However, I noticed that there are some inconsistency. For example, the MC contradicting himself (chapter 24). Another example, MC's first meeting with the novel's original MC. The interaction ended awkwardly and were a bit abrupt with the MC's response. Other than a few bits and nitpicking those, the overall story is interesting and have a sense of story flow. Also, a last bit of advice to improve the story is by making a story map. The story map doesn't need to be fully or well made, the story map must be able to guide the story direction. That's it for this review.
