The Kingdom of Arthos - Reviews

I really like this story and I hope it continues on for quite a bit. Thanks for the good read? Also why do you have to make it so. You need 140 characters

Three hours: a gamble of time is definitely the right title for this book. only in this book, i smell poetry, sci-fi. The world background is excellent and the diction to which every event is portray is top notch. Nice work author.  

up till now goodlet's wait for the update

Author, I loved your story, it's obvious that there is potential, lots of potential, seeping from your novel. The only thing lacking is um, how do I say this? Ah yes, a narrative technique. It's evident from the synopsis that you lack a narrative technique. Please don't treat this as criticism, merely feedback to make your story even better! I love the concept, the worldbuilding, but the story could use some descriptions. For a beginning author, your writing is quite good, and I believe you should keep writing because practice makes perfect :) Good luck and kudos to you!

"Of course, this is all real bud. I told you I am part of you now. I usually remain dormant and just listen to your hilarious thoughts" Xennor said.

3) Act (insert number) in my book(s) mean chapter __

"You're back! You're back I was so scared you were gone forever please don't leave me! Why were gone for so long!"(Uta)

*Sigh* "Alright, a cub really doesn't know the  dangers of the world. Very well, I am in need of meat but what I require isn't ordinary meat. I need five pieces of wolf meat. Although wolves are ferocious, their meat is equally as delicious and tender. Bring me back the wolf meat I require and I'll consider giving you a copy of my very own cook book."

SO BI**H moved his head towards me  and  had a pleasant surprise. 'Do you like that i survived' and believe me after this battle i will be the only one to like that'.

On the other side of the sickly young man was a girl with average weight, but far from average height. This girl standing on her tiptoes would maybe make it to an average mans knees. She was just too tiny.

When he got there his father had his eyes open as if he was waiting for him and said "Alexander, what brings you here?"

I could use a little fuel myself