Author, I loved your story, it's obvious that there is potential, lots of potential, seeping from your novel. The only thing lacking is um, how do I say this? Ah yes, a narrative technique. It's evident from the synopsis that you lack a narrative technique. Please don't treat this as criticism, merely feedback to make your story even better! I love the concept, the worldbuilding, but the story could use some descriptions. For a beginning author, your writing is quite good, and I believe you should keep writing because practice makes perfect :) Good luck and kudos to you!
