Jeeze, titles and summaries are getting more and more misleading these days. With how this one is, I was expecting a proper cheat system with some absurd balance issues. Turns out it was just a LoL based system, and the title was about as useful as "invincible godking ascension" or similar garbage word salad. The story itself is rather good, overall. The plot takes its sweet time getting started, but it's not dragged out intentionally or anything, the author just actually did some setup for once. Better written than most of the stuff you see here in that regard, actually. Really hope this one makes it.
Hello! It's my first time seeing a webnovel by another Pakistani! Although I'm not into romance novels, your writing quality and story is quite good. I would recommend it to those who like a good modern day action romance novel. P.S I would appreciate it if you check out my novel and please leave a review even if a negative one how I can improve. Thanks!
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Hey!Good day to you! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to email mollyringdom*@*gmail.com (delete *）We are mainly looking for adventurous novels (Fantasy, Sci-fi, Paranormal Urban, Action, Thriller/Suspense, Game Fiction). Looking forward to your email.
Interesting concept but story went downhill really fast. Cliche beginning gf leaves MC then beggar sold MC magical ring. He made money fast selling low tech for gold but unrealistic trades in real world happened. He sold 9000 kilos of gold to neighbor for 500m then started a company. By chapter 6 he made 70billion. The author might rethink the pace of the story and redo the novel again.
I will cut one star for the quality of English, because really. But besides this, it's a solid story, an interesting and exciting mix of cultivation and LitRPG, not something I'd ever seen before.
Good writing, great description, steady updates, nice story, and cool characters. My only issue with the story is that the grammar is a bit off. Please give it some edits and think about getting Grammarly. You are also welcome to check out my tale "Avatar: Macai's Journey".
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Soooo gooodd! I'm not an expert when it comes to rating books so I'll just say whatever made me like it.*Spoiler alert*First you have to keep in mind that this isn't a reincarnation story, which is really refreshing! But if you're looking for a hero that dies and gets sent to another universe, this book isn't for you.The MC isn't overpowered, to make the story boring, but quite the opposite, he starts without any powers, only to discover he's got some special abilities once he gets kidnapped....I can't say more without spoiling a lot of the fun, but the writing style is definitely awesome, not easy for beginners, but quite good if you ask meAs for the story development.. all I have to say is DAMMMMNN it always gets me excited! It's not a static story, the plot is always three times more complicated that you'd thinkAs much as I've read, side characters are so active, we even get to view some scenes in their point of view which is really fun. I'm so tried of books with only one MC doing his/her own thing alone
So Im just wondering Where you find the none Edited Version of this book...............................................................................!
This is probably one of the harder reviews I've written. To give away the ending, Spirit Immortal comes in the the low B/high C range for me, but I'm pretty brutal with my reviews so that's actually a pretty high score for me. The difficulty comes in that the way I would score the later chapters are vastly different from how I would rate the early chapters. If I was to break it down by volumes the first two volumes score in the D range, volumes three and four are B's while volumes five and six both rate a solid A.Spirit Immortal is honestly a fairly sweeping tale set with a cultivation backdrop. I phrase it like that specifically because even though the MC is always working towards a higher cultivation, it isn't the cultivation as his goal it is instead a tool he uses to measure himself by.The main flaw is that Spirit Immortal is a Character Driven novel where the main character doesn't start with a clear goal. He goes as far to describe himself as a leaf carried by whichever way the water flows. This isn't bad but it's much harder to write in the early chapters then if you were writing a Story Driven novel, where the plot moves along because of an external factor, i.e. an enemy army is coming or you have to defeat the demon king.The comments on the early chapters highlight this indirectly, where people attack the author for useless details and pointless arcs. Reading through the whole story, these comments aren't true as you encounter a similar amount of details and varied arcs in other novels, but it's how the readers perceive the story since they are reading it 'in the moment'. What it actually is is a problem in pacing and *******. Since the motivation comes from the character but the character is still discovering the world around them it's hard to generate the appropriate feeling of ******* in order to carry the story. The way you mitigate this is with foreshadowing and switching character viewpoints in order to portray what's happening external to the MC that will move the story forward and create a sense of crisis. The ******st way for me to phrase is it that it's ok if your main character is aimless and doesn't seem to know where he's going, but you can't let your story seem that way.However this problem disappears to a large degree by the beginning of volume three, the momentum which the story has built starts to sweep up the reader. However this also means you have to read a hundred chapters in to get to juicy parts of the story, which makes it a hard novel for me to recommend. There are a lot of absolutely brilliant characters in this story, but you have to take your time to get to know them and the world they build around themselves.Since the author has stated that he isn't interested in participating in the premium program on Webnovel I'm actually going against the advice I've given to every other author here: Don't go back and rewrite your story, it *always* turns out *bad*. In this case I would actually encourage the author to hire either a Developmental Editor or a Story Coach to help revise the story and then publish it electronically himself. Alternatively just treat it as your 'first million words' and keep going.
This needs more love it's one of my favourite reads at the moment its much better than a lot of the other cultivation novels out there hopefully it gets the attention it deserves