It is easy to read, the text block is a little rough, but it does not cause any special complaints. The title page is attractive. The story is fascinating.You can advise those who like to read stories about school and romance.Respect to the author for an interestingly written story!
Grammar 2/5Surprise surprise, another novel with a good idea only to be a weapon of grammar destruction.Your sentences don't make sense and you don't know how to interconnect conversations. You think that only with "bla bla" the people will understand who the **** is talking. But no, it doesn't help. Not even one bit.Not even that, you don't put descriptions on the dialogues, so most of the time I imagine 2 persons speaking like robots.ALSO!!! Can you PLEASE stop using Chinese additives to names? Nobody understands them and nobody likes them. Updates 4/5A lot of small chapters to build numbers, not something surprising. But a thing most authors do to gather people.Story 3/5Cliche after cliche. The school beauty falls in love with him the first time they meet because of a drawing he drew because he liked her smile. ok...wtf dude.Mother/Father believes his son no matter what. And they suddenly gained powers, What effects would make in their life? In their daily lives? In their work? Interaction with friends? No mention of them at all.Best friend and him always talk with the sentence "Bro
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This is really a thought-provoking book, after reading it I have been thinking about it for a while. The concept is fresh and including a take on various subjects......its a must-read, in my opinion...
I genuinely think that your novel is interesting. Although personally I found it too heavy, but it was also light at the same time.I found some words are philosophical so it's really meaningful. The story development is also pace very well. Thanks for introducing this novel to me!
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There was once a little boy, he fought bitter battles an celebrated victory against his own weakness. He fought against Gods to protect his dear family. The story ended but the journey continues.
I read the raws. MC is really foolish (he is a child, so that can be his excuse, but he is supposed to be from a noble family, and they supposedly get good training from childhood). The next things I mention all happen in the first ten chapters, so can't really be considered as spoiler.He sold all the assets of his family for loaves of bread or small amounts of pocket change. He has a good teacher who helped him in his need, but he neither consults him about his doubts nor asks for advice. He is greedy and easily led into the plans of others who want to use him (the most stupid thing is he wanted to save up food, so he bought lots of bread with his first gold coin, and then was so surprised when the bread got spoiled after a few days. I mean, what do you expect- it's a perishable food- buy rice instead, or wheat, or corn- even foolishness should have its limits).
Listen, if your new to webnovel and like isekai than this novel is for you, but tbh the plot and cliches in the book is like a copy and paste of every other isekai be it novel, manga, or anime. So for experienced readers who are sick of the same plot outline then steer clear and save yourselves the lost time. Now feedback for author San, not bad at all for the novel, it was kinda rushed at the beginning and felt slightly forced, but everything connected and the flow of speech and storyline made sense so congrats on that. (Plz dont use the typical isekai plot template for a novel ever again, although the loli is not a bad idea and attracts more readers you gotta be careful that it doesn't transform into a typical oversaturated plotline)
*This review is based on the first 5 chapters*Constructive Criticism:Your cover art style does not seem to match the style of your synopsis nor your novel, I'd personally suggest a change, however, I see that your readers seem not to want that, so do as you see fit. Also I noticed some minor grammar issues in the first few chapters. I notice it seems like the only truly important character of the first 5 chaps is the MC, I hope there are more later in the story.Positive Feedback:Good, albeit confusing, character build up of the MC. I definitely see that you know where you are trying to take this, that is very good, some stories lack that. Keep up the good work.;,;.Personal Feedback:I'm sorry, I will not be continuing this story. It's not really something I want to read. While you did good enough that reading wasn't hard on me after the second chap, it still wasn't really fun for me. HOWEVER! Don't let this stop you from writing.. You have many fans and will let them down if you do. I ask you, Please finish what you start (even if only to spite the haters).;,;.