Loving the story so far. Can’t wait for him to go into the outside world and show his master how it has changed since his time. Also liked how his cultivation method is like a rubber band ball or a yarn ball can’t wait for him to learn more. Overall a good story if a bit slow right now.
Shamelessly reviewing my own novel hehehehe. I'm encouraging people to read this novel of mine and place their thoughts in the comment. I'm open to all criticism as I believe that it can improve my writing. I hope you all enjoy your reading. Thank you very much.
I plan to upload 1 chapter a day
-Lazy Gamer.
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A Gem, i would place this novel with Lord of mysterious simply based on potential, the characters arent cutouts they make rational and irrational decisions that fit there characterIm very happy that a new original has found its way to the topPros Potential for the story to go anywhereOrigional idea that has a unique spin on an monster systemStable uploadsIm not able to guess the plot or what will happen nextConsI need more chapters and the chapters fly by due to thisGive it a try, its intriguing where the story is progressing with little predictables that are a common turn off for the system oriented genre
Interesting plot....I hope MC could grow more faster....It is already chapter 30...but MC is still a child....Anyway character names are easy to remember...GD luck author.......
Only made it to page 10, the Main character is mentally challenged with no backbone, i just cant take this anymore .........................
great writing quality with good sense of humourperfect start of story with great continuationcharacters is interesting (a lot of changes in emotions)stabile updating with great new content in each chaptergreat world background in VRMMO game as well as real world as story is in game and real lifecontinue hard (hopefully pleasant) work
Sooooooooooo Gooooooooood ....................................................................................................................
This is a review of the first twenty-seven chapters. The story is based in a magical world where different civilizations are fighting for dominance. The main character, Zhang Yang, is bound to a village building order(a system) and has to build up a village that can last for 300 years along with other tasks inorder to return home. Many of the antigonists are also bound to a similar village building order. The plot feels like a story version of the game Civilization. The Protagonist’s character fluctuates between a laid-back acceptance and paranoia. Even with the author’s explanations, not all of Zhang Yang’s decisions make sense. Overall, the story is entertaining and doesn’t require you to understand how the “system “ functions to enjoy it.
story is great and the idea is fun. but writing quality? sh*t. sentences (most of them) dont make sense which is regretful. i liked the story .will add it to my library tho. hopefully it gets fixed.
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