overall nice story.Just need to work on your grammar.Though It's your first work so I understand.
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Who is the blonde molf in cover picture she looks like someone from a manga but cant remember which one please do tell if anyone knows?Also more chapters
You ever read those dime a dozen urban chinese manhua? Ever think, wow, this art's quality sure is low, the harem's boring as ****, and the main protagonist might just be a high functioning autist?Yes. It's literally that manhua, but as a novel. Webnovel, why? Why are you translating such pieces of **** when there's legitimately good novels out there?
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Hey this is good! I like this! *Looks at update rate* AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
there's no build up to the story just straight to it. it feel like it was rushed and lacking foundation. it was a good concept but poor execution.
i think this is the only bad thing about this novel is how quick they are too kill i understand some people need to be killed but he didn't show and emotion in saying he was gonna kill her it sounded like he was talking about a bug this reminds of another novel where the villain goes into another world with the mc but he see's everyone as npc's and kills them all and it seems like the dont care about anyone but their crushes which from what i see they arent going to end up with them they ignore every girl but the one's they like which is kinda annoying
Amazing book, love the plot and execution HATE the slow updates. But I will keep reading when it died update and only hope it covers quickee
The story started out fine, but then about halfway in they leave the medieval setting and travel to WW2, which was a radical difference from the beginning. Eventually most of the chapters are just repeats. And then some weird stuff about their parents and dying and the story goes silent, and all the chapters named [updated later] and not updated.Also during that halfway plot the whole revenge against his team who betrayed him just dissapears. I don't find it makes sense to go with a WW2 setting halfway through.
Splendid......the book is a bit like the flash but the concepts are totally different. I feel, this book is even better than the flash. Lovely book you've got here Aliyu!
Perfect storytelling style.... creative and really allows readers desire for more chapters and chapters to read about...Mixed feelings allows readers to be curious what happens next.WOW .