I Appreciate your work you are a great thinker and has immense potential A great story.....one must read
I will try my best to keep an honest and fair review. First and foremost writing, quality is five stars there is only small problem here and there not worth to be mentioned. second : update stability which we don’t have any problem here too.three: and hear the problem begin the story development is very shallow and cliche was a couple of loop hole in the story which has been corrected. fourth: character design all the characters of the stereotype very shallow have no personality and no buildup on the personality let me simplify it for you the story take place inside a third rated game and the character are 2d and there is no role beyond this to the character for example the side character that has been kicked out of the school he didn’t explore his character beyond the fact that he is obsessive of the original protagonist you didn’t show why he’s so obsessive with her did he have trauma in his life or she remain him of his deceased mother or something like that. and if you want my opinion to improve the character design of the protagonist you can make the protagonist completely confused with the memory of the original bodies owner and he feel everything that that the original body owner feel from sadness to happiness to jealousy to everything and you can start from there and start building his character. Don’t need to make him the holy type protagonist that make no mistake. You can make him a jealous asshole. or an angry teen entering an Emo phase you don’t have to make your protagonist perfect because no one is perfect.fifth: there is little to none world building after 30 chapter I was expecting some kind of hint or explanation for the bigger world, but nop all you have is the Academy in two Kingdom and even if you explained one of these two either the academy or the kingdom Ali more than happy to give you 4 to 5 stars however there is mention that he is in the Academy with some very small explanation about the classroom infirmary and the boy dorm room example he going to his dorm room he gone to the classroom he goes to the infirmary and that is literally it as for the kingdom the author only mentioned two kingdom and the protagonist is the second son of one of those King on the side character who got kicked out of the school is the son of the second king I quite disappointing to be honest especially the character since it is at the end of the day a romantic novel is supposed to focus on character building and story development and the drama between them which I didn’t see at all all I see is the protagonist protecting his damsel in distress.
Only 1 thing dont't fit: the world construction, i mean we don't know if this world have magic or something releated! But it's a very good novel
book seems good from what I have read, locks at chapter 29 and to catch up would cost about $55 and if you want privilege that's another $70.... no thanks that's just crazy.
The author has a unique approach on the story as he switches perspective between engaging with the readers and strorytelling. In fact, it was rather immersive— that is until cut scenes of information jump into the picture and leaves one lamenting the sudden disruption! Some people might think, I don’t like info dumb, and straight up quit from reading… Well, don’t quit just yet! The story has got potential in it (coming from someone who read a very populare novel with a similar theme.)
At chapter 70 and I have very mixed feelings about this novel. First off, it has a lot of potential and so far, it's pretty good tbh. As for why I have mixed feelings; pretty much entirely because of how the MC is portrayed.. It seems the author has fumbled slightly when making a manipulative MC. The MCs intelligence can only be considered above average while everyone else is just stupid. Second issue, the MC is very arrogant. I will say, I 100% am for an arrogant MC...but they MUST be charismatic and strong to back that up (example: Ren from TAPOV). Orien is just cocky and annoying at points. I will say, he is getting development, but he needs A LOT at this point to be a good MC. I will keep reading because, as I said, it has a lot of potential.
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