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hey bro. I really appreciate your novel. keep it up. your novel is a hidden gem. its a shame that nobody notices your novel, only time will tell. Fighting!!
Half the story At this point didnt even include the mc.
Fresh air!!! This is what this book is about. If u have never seen exes and love rivals being friends with the main leads u will definitely SEEE IT HERE. It’s a very different but interesting book compared to what I have read before. Both the characters are strong and the supporting characters are really caring and loving. LOVE THIS BOOK LOADS!!!!
I read until chapter 44 and decided to stop.
I'll explain why based on the rating.
The pros:
1. I love the world background. The idea of the sect is small within a not so great kingdom within a great (?) empire. Outside of the continent, there might be more things to be discovered as hinted through MC's blur memories of the past.
2. Updates are 10 chapters/week. Amazing!
3. There's a clear direction. Find disciples, unlock their potentials, solve their problems yada yada. I'm satisfied, at least.
The cons:
1. The pacing is slow and there's too much fillers.
Why is a servant brewing black tea and green tea important to the story? Did MC and her disciple got addicted to them?
Nope. In fact, the servant competition could be compress into a few paragragh (or none at all) and be done with. If the servant is special, the focus should be on her instead of the whole competition.
And the upper echelons attending the new disciples examination from the get go is strange too. If they only attend during the final, I understand, but from the very beginning? Even watching when they are checking their bone age? Strange. They have too much time in their hands.
2. Character design is too common. TBH if it was not stated that MC was from another world, I wouldn't even know. There's no uniqueness from the way he talk or behave, even when he's alone. The only time I notice is when he used the word 'broadcast' while he tried to activate his disciple's physique.
Aside from that, there's no hint of slang or casualness from him.
Aside from the rating, I really love the idea of MC collecting disciples which is why I read the novel.
Feels like author is purposely seeing how mad they can make readers by rushing the power curve all the while making the MC and other characters as dumb as dregs. This cheat could have been used with a light touch to slowly build an interesting story with depth. But no, he'll be crushing planets by ch 40. While interesting clan building novels get rejected this is the kind of novel that will get chosen because people want a 60 ch novel. Lame.
not good or bad pretty average. I'd keep reading but spending money on this novel isnt really worth it. the dialogue feels stinted and not very fluid. some grammatical errors but they dont really affect much but again if ur gonna pay for a novel it shouldn't have those issues
One of the best novels in the recent wave of releases. While the mc’s system seems OP, it doesn’t actually affect the novle much... at least so far.
nice like cultivator chat group but myth gods instead of just cultivator
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There’s currently only 13 chapters available and I’ve enjoyed them and like the background world. I just hope there could be more frequent updates however I’ve seen your bio so with two jobs that may be difficult. Either way keep up the good work and if you struggle to find time for updating that’s also fine. Good luck with everything Sir
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Engaging plot with realistic characters. It's really interesting how the author switches between different time backgrounds. Really curious to read the following chapters. Nice work.