As for the hero, he will come to the writer because if he comes, I want him to give me a strong system with the ability to travel between worlds (Patrick, I love you, man, please give me superpowers) [img=recommend]
140 character is too long I am so lazy to write a review that long. Can I just write only 100? Well look like I can't maybe just maybe 139 okay.
Novel does not match title or synopsis..
20 capítulos arrastrando la pelea de puto pájaro llorón puta historia asquerosa
From the synopsis its looked promising, the unique theme and comedy.
Havent seen pure stupidity like this before, everyone just going to screeching at the PC and yelling "ITS MAGIC"
Looking forward on how its gonna be
ignore i am just here to enjoy the story
Incredibly boring, the mc does things just because the author says so, he doesn't have any motivation or desire, he just exists and reacts to the system.
His "peak cultivation" means nothing because mr.author was smart enough to downplay it right away by introducing this so called world awakening, his cultivation is so irrelevant that he shows it off in chapter 9 just to save a girl he doesn't care about (oh by the way, we have the out of touch boomer: "it's just a woman" kind of writing so expect every female character to be one dimensional shells and massively objectified)
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Hello, fellow author. I'm going to give you some constructive criticism. 1: Please show what's happening in the story more. •In your story, you tell the reader that the character feels a certain way. Ex: "He felt confident." Here's an example of showing your protagonist's confidence."He raised his chin high, looked his opponent in the eye, and smirked." You can increase your word count if you explain each emotion. And your readers can immerse themselves better. 2: Please don't repeat the same information twice In the same chapter. •This disrupts the reader's immersion in the story. •I know it helps add word count, but that frustrates readers. 3: Your grammar needs some work. It's hard to immerse yourself in a book if there are many grammatical errors.
From what I read so far I like the story development and the way some of the characters interaction. The writing itself could use some proof reading or better grammar corrections since there are a lot of wrong tense usage. It’s a very relaxing read. Thank you for writing. Keep it up!
These is a great write up am already looking forward to all the mystery in these book. You have always been a great author keep it
What a poetic way of narrating just one scene, I liked it.
The first chapter does not explain anything but leaves the reader in suspense and floods with great interest to know how it continues.
Overall, it's a pretty good opening chapter if you want it to be a long story.