Titled Elves were creatures with less than half of their Heritage filled with the Elven Bloodline who belonged to other races. The Heritage[1] is an infinate space which contains all the Bloodlines in a creature.
The whole premise of this novel is unique and worth exploring. However, the author failed badly at writing emotion. It's to the point of making me wonder if he's a sociopath.The MC went to look for his friend/roommate he's been playing games all night with.He found his dead body mutilated by stomach acid along with a couple others. You'd think he'd atleast be affected by the scene. But nope, the author glossed over it as if it's nothing. Then he went home and acted as if nothing happened in front of his dead friend's fiancé, just because it's inconvenient. Then when she cried after hearing the news, he "comforted" her by saying "It's live. He wouldn't have died if he hadn't gone". What kind of comforting is that? Had the author never once comforted anyone before?Then he met up with a group of friends, after seeing 2 people getting eaten by fishes in a park, and confirmed that apocalypse is coming, he asked the group if they wanted to go karaoke? Dude...And of course, he raped the widow girl 2 weeks after her fiancé died. But apparently, it's okay cuz she felt good. The next morning, he decapitated a thug, and then proceed to massacre the ones running away in 20s just because they're thugs. Bear in mind that the dudes who ran away didn't do anything. Again, zero feeling. After all that, you'd think that he's an experienced warrior from ancient time? Nope, he's just a normal fresh graduate office worker. It's as if to the author, what he did is perfectly normal. It would have been fine if the author intended for the MC to be an antihero character, but he doesn't. Every time the MC does something ridiculous, the author keeps slapping in some weak excuses to portray him as a good guy. Just because he's a normal guy doesn't make it okay to rape. Just because they're thugs doesn't mean you can massacre them when they haven't done anything. If the MC wants to rape or massacre, face it like a man. Don't come up with some hypocritical excuses to portray him as a good guy.
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Read until chapter 12 and so far I'm liking this a lot, chapters feel a bit small though.I loved how the second chapter was so dark, instantly pulled me into the story.The abilities of the MC are also interesting, reminds me of a certain scientific accelerator.I was kinda expecting some eye related skill.
Needs more background. No idea on the aliens or psychic power. Feels like the author forgot what they were talking about. Then the author started adding their comments about how they need to speed up. They constantly spoil their own work by saying what is happening next. It feels like half their novel got shuffled out of order of events. For free reading ok, but it got too painful to read at chp30
Excellent story, great world building and Op character development.
I see a lot of potential here just after reading the first couple chapters. The unique way the dialogue is written is very attention grabbing. It's not what most authors do, and I think its an excellent style that is very similar to movie scripts which really helps push your imagination. I hope the author will continue leaning into that!The world is also VERY interesting and EXTREMELY unique, but in my opinion more time needs to be spent easing us into it. Its very jarring to go from one idea or concept to another with so little time in between. As a reader I like more time to invest in an interesting concept and having so many interesting concepts thrown at me one right after the other is very overwhelming.
Antony the Gravitational Ant has ended becoming my favorite MC of monster reincarnation. This guy has it all, he is funny, amusing, ruthless and the best damn cunning insect that one could find on fiction.
Very good story made me laugh alot characters are well made um what else do i put here man i suck at making review why did i even try sigh is this 140 characters yet
I like everything abou the story except for your writing style. No offence but you write like a child. The sentences are awkward and you keep using the wrong tense. I can understand grammatical errors, but please fix your sentence structures. If you can do that, your story has the potential to be one of the best on this app.
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This story seems interesting. There are not as many cliches as usual in this kind of story. I am wanting to read more. I hope it is selected.