Chapter 33 review
I like the execution of the story and the use of the everyone’s a lord trope. I also like the limitations given to the MCs super OP ability as well. However the MC has to be the stupidest most uncreative person taken to this world which makes it hard to push through the chapters. I know that the author has said that he is new to the world and doesn’t know how to use his abilities but the way the story is going I don’t see him getting better. ‼️SPOILER‼️
For instance he uses the internet to get ideas of what to create in this world,
This is less of a review, more of a first impression as I have read 20+ chapters while writing it. So my opinion might be incomplete. I apologize if something like that happens and would like others to correct me.
I would like to start by thanking the author for his hard work and for such an amazing story. It has been quite a long time since I have read a web/light novel with a grounded and realistic MC as well as a well-built world setting.
The story started with brief background information on how it all started and necessary information about different levels. It was a nice touch and magnificently done. I liked the temperament of MC. He is intelligent yet has the thought process of 13 years old. He is responsible but doesn't give the feeling of an old man in a young boy's body. His reaction to gaining his sight back, his way to deal with money, or his reaction to his current situation is all realistic, at least as realistic as it can be in a fantasy world. He is not like a typical LN/WN MC who thinks "I am gonna murder this guy's three-generation because he disrespected me by making fun of me" not is he a pushover. He handled his situation like a mature person with a hint of teenage flair (talking about that Middle-finger scene). Overall he is a pretty likable character.
The magic system seems pretty simple and easy to follow. I don't have to check again and again which level is after what. The world setting is good so far, not too confusing. The pacing of the story is good so far. It is not going too slow or too fast. But I think there is some space to improve regarding these topics.
So far I have talked about the good things of the story. Now let's talk about the things that can be improved.
First thing, Proofreading. The story is mostly well written. But there are quite a few mistakes in grammar and sentence making that could have been avoided with a more round of checking. The number and frequency are not that high but still, it hinders the immersion.
Next, supporting character development. If first 22 chapter is any indication, I think the author should spend a bit more time developing supporting/minor characters. We have only 1 noticeable supporting character till chapter 23 and it's Greg. He is hinted to be a main supporting cast and good friend of MC. But do we know anything about him other than he is rich and talented? We don't know anything about Greg as a person or feel connected to him. If it is solved in the latter part of the story then it's ok. However, I think it should have been much sooner.
The world-building and background description are also much to be desired. For example, it helps the readers to visualize if you give a brief description of the Room MC is living in or the market and its shops when he went out shopping. Maybe a bit more description about people and environment when he went out for the first time after his sight was back. this would have helped us feel connected to the MC more.
This part is some selfish request as a reader.
Please keep the MC realistic and relatable like this. Don't make him like a thousand other MC whose improvement doesn't follow any logic or common sense. I am still miffed about that 120 points in the practical exam. MC has been blind and malnourished throughout his all life. Moreover, He doesn't exercise or haven't practiced the practical part at all. Suddenly 5 days after getting his sight back, He is using martial arts routine accurately and smoothly. And in these 5 days, he had to gather mana for the exam, learn how to read and write, prepare for the theoretical part of the exam and go out sightseeing. It is almost physically impossible for him to do this properly, no matter how easy the routine was. The craziest part is he got more points than Greg who is practicing longer than MC, has better development, and seems like a genius in martial arts. Please don't do things like this. Don't throw logic out of the window to bring sudden growth to MC or sudden character development. Please introduce a romantic interest but not a harem please. we have more than enough harem plot on this site. what we are lacking is a meaningful, non-harem romance. Please fill that void.
I've read the first 10 chapters and I already got hook! Some of the chapters made me laugh. This made me enjoy. Loving every bit of the story and I'll definitely finish this masterpiece!!
Definitely one of the best novels I have read in webnovel.
Although the writing and grammar are not very good, this novel is very original and I have never seen anything like it, and now that I've read to the latest chaper(Chp 9) I'm craving for more!
9/10 - Very good
F*ck it!
Since he has the same surname as me(De Leon) lets make it a 9.5/10 :)
I'm putting my time on the line for this seemingly unique Xianxia novel, hope I am not dissapointed
I still can't understand what is going on in this story. It has too much going on throughout it. I'm sorry but I will be deleting this from my library. Good luck with your stories.
I like this story so far. Not like your typical cultivation story where you get drug buffed by random ass plants (is that the right way to say it?) and isn’t always cultivating and shit. Also I like the way he’s taking revenge on Tina. Good job
Grammerly has nothing on this man, they should be paying him instead to proofread. Bet he has 100/100 on it.
Anyways great novel you have, keep going. Loved the daily uploads so far.
Over all, it caught my attention. From the contents on each chapter, it was a blast! Keeo up the good work author! It will be a hit someday! Have a good day! ❤❤
The story has lots of potential. It started with adrenaline pumping action in chapter 1 and it truly was a great reading experience. I think the choice of 1st POV suits the story well since it's the experience of one person. However, I also think that there is too much introspection (chap2) that some elements already become repetitive. It's also become slowpaced since he had not met anyone yet and still alone for two chapters. Maybe I'm just impatient or I have become one since Chapter1 was quite full of action so the expectation was there. In chapter3 he already met another character and some questions were answered, but only after paragraphs of introspection again. Just a concerned reminder from one author to the next, be careful not to go to the purple prose territory. Also try to eliminate redundancy. All the best author! Keep on writing!
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I originally really like the Story and lowkey mcs and so i read the mtls up to chapter 80 and the i dropped the novelThe novel Was fine and although not without flaws( a bit repetitive, slow story development) it Was still a fun slice of Life lowkey MC read until the Worst Flaw that DESTROYED the Novel ... Nationalism The Story develops more and more in the Direction -China is the Greatest and Number 1-America are all Evil Barbarians-China Should Dominate the World because China is Number 1.another fun story ruined by Nationalism, dont bother reading it, it just gets worse