Good work so far! Can't wait to read more!
congaratulationsto the author. hope your success
You have strong and great concept to work with, it felt pretty original, but the grammar makes me lose some of the immersion sometimes, but looking past that, I was able to enjoy the mechanics of the world you have built, keep it up!
One of the best novels ever on this site, it's a literal hidden gem. This story blew me away. The world building is amazing, Extremely good, in a single day it became one of my favorites.
After closing the prayer, quickly we go to home.
Hah, human world, what a wonderful world? If i can go to the human world thats will be awesome....
"Yeah."
Okay now, the rank 1 is called Mamat and he is also our class leader, the name is cool, not like my friend Kenji, which is often ridicoulus, because his name sounds funny.
Ezio took a deep breath and his face turned serious.
"Remind me not to annoy Itachi" Usopp says to Brook as the Musician tunes his guitar and lets out a cheery laugh; "Itachi-san sure has an effective way of dealing with threats, it does my heart good knowing he's on our side... oh wait I don't have a heart Yohohohoho"
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"Wasn't it too early, me?" Bao asked.