So firstly I just wanna state that this is actually a good novel, could even be great. I have issues with a few things though. 1stly too much exposition, way too much exposition. This novel could actually benefit from breaking up and expanding the first few chapters to flush out more intricate details and better character development and such. I feel as though the Author loves this novel and has a great many ideas he wants to implement and it shows by coming off as if he's rushing the development of the story. There's a distinct difference between withholding information and slowly trickling it in after hooking the reader with great action beats and giving information dumps to get critical information out of the way. There are some grammar errors as well as spelling flaws, but by far the biggest issue is the exposition. Sometimes it even rips the reader out of immersion of the story. We gain information that could easily be told to us in more creative ways.
Overall the author is creative and even though this is a systems novel, I feel they do a great job of utilizing it as a tool rather than the main focus. The main focus is the world, and there's thought put into this world, which is why the exposition drives me up a wall because you are taking away from truly expanding the beauty of the world. I know this may seem like a rant or bashing but I'm only being tough because you gotta gem here, slow down and polish that baby. If you establish that beginning right all that juicy tid bits i know your rushing to get to will pay off even more.
Can't write the word "semi" properly... decides to write a story...
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Holy WOW! This is one incredible collection!! I have a little question, I noticed that the individual chapters are the story titles that are mostly alphabetized in order and ending in "L". So that must mean you actually have a ton more stories to upload!? I'd really love to see stories starting with "M" (mom, mommy), and with "S" (step mom, step Sister, sister). Thanks for all the uploads! I really appreciate them! Please don't stop! Thanks
Author reposts chapters to get inflated release numbers, good story but ruined by obvious abuse by author, who will repost old chapters to get paid, and inflated their release rate, disappointing to see a new release and be asked to unlock with points then find out its just author posting one of his fake chapters.
Firstly your a hard working author. Secondly the mc is rational and ambitious with no moral restrains. Thirdly Im hooked.
This novel is absolutely amazing.Even if I tried,I can't give less than 5 stars.
I am always waiting for the new chapters.
Simply put, it's a novel you read to pass time as you wait for whatever it is you're waiting for.
(This review is based on the story so far, written at the latest chapter of chapter 72).
The literary quality in the novel is awkward due to grammatical inconsistencies, and the blatancy of the author not proofreading nor editing his/her work.
The story started with a interesting premise, but is executed poorly throughout the progression of the novel. We're told the protagonist lived a rat's life in his previous world, but has a mysterious connection to the phenomena of his new world. It is interesting, but it seems the author is just parading with the novel with smoke and mirrors to make it feel mysterious but it truly isn't.
Speaking of character design, all the characters are templates. The MC is one-dimensional, with no progression in character nor was there any statements that allows us to better understand him or any other character so far. His character is set in-stone and will probably never have a slight deviation from the start of the novel, or allow us to understand him or any other character better.
The world background is fickle, just like a majority of translated novels. There's a lot of locations but they're never fully explored or at least given in-depth treatment to allow us to immerse in them. (The story is still in it's early stages, this just based on the story so far, hopefully it will change).
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The story is very good. it's interesting and thrilling with each part ahead.. I strongly support and suggest the writer to continue writing and know that you have ur supporter's backing u and encouraging u ahead..
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I have not read anything, but ayy my fav linux as cover. I will give you about 4 stars just to get the ball rolling. As for writing another thing. I love the yellow thing on the logo. Kali linux is "cyber security OS" which is used to "prevent" the attacks and used for "ethical" hacking.
Interested