It's a laid-back story with a system that's not going to destroy the world's power system (at least until chapter 32) and has quite a bit of potential
I really enjoyed the story because of its captivating plot twists and well-developed characters.The setting of the story was beautifully described, transporting me to a different world with vivid imagery and immersive details.Overall, I would highly recommend this story to anyone. It's a captivating tale that will stay with you long after you've turned the final page.
Read until chapter 55, nothing really happens. Auther just keeps on rambling about the future and events that play no significance to the current events. MC is your typical useless luck struck plot armor MC. Outside of making money through the stock market, which he pawned of to one of the female characters, he really doesn’t do anything important. The flow of the story is on the slow side and the events are so random that it ruins the reading experience. For the Auther. Don’t explain so much useless information. Show your story don’t tell. Show the MC having a meeting and telling each individual their goal and when they need to accomplish said goal by. In other words, you’re trying to make your MC this great leader without them showing any leadership skills. Don’t tell us why a character is going to be important or how they’re related to the MC, show us through their interactions with the MC. Example, when you had the two neighbors scene talking to his parents, don’t explain who they are. Instead just leave them until they show up in the main plot of the story. Then inform the readers using the interaction between the MC and the other characters. That’s all I’ve got for you. In summary it’s not a bad story, the author just needs to learn how to write better. An editor would help but I’m aware of how expensive that can get.
Instability in upload frequency is the only drawback I have seen so far in the novel.
A good story-telling is one of the factors that creates a perfect story and makes the story outstanding a lot. Additionally, both practicing Qi and comedy scenes are a perfect fit, they come out very well, good job, author!
Racist (most probably) European or American novel where they make Russia traitor and Africa borderline Alien ? and Mc has attitude similar to typical US army's General who will save world from Alien invasion and Massacre Russian traitors and African (Black people you get it right) Alien... I hope everyone with there just heart can band together BAN this... Its DEGRADING... (FOR YOUR INFORMATION I WOULD LIKE TO INFORM YOU THAT I BELONG TO COUNTRY OF SOUTH EAST ASIA)
One can tell that it's already a (great) book.
the story development and character design is good.
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Very good story. Thanks for the work autor-san, i hope this got bigger because you deservet it.Good luck for the future!..........................................................................................
Hmm MC has a system which shows him options for evolution. I mostly like emotionless systems because they are less annoying. It also show that mc will become op if he evolves steadily but he is not op from start which is good. There are no grammar mistake. The story is slow paced which is good for a apocalyptic plot ( from my perspective) .if update is 1 chapter per day, it rise anticipation of the readers. the story is descriptive enough. It is overall a good novel needs a interaction of characters.
This story has a bit of a rough start but after a couple chaps this story turned out to be really good. Looking forward to more chapters.