"Yes, director!"
"Oh, I don't want to bother you with that much work,"
After a few tense seconds, she flips it around and slides it closer to Sal's side of the counter.
"Ever since I learned that none of you make the right decisions," Keshrak sneered.
Of course, the changes shouldn't be too apparent as if I am a different person ....
"What are you saying, that depends on who wins the next game. But in the end, we'll both die and then repeat the cycle. That's our existence. Really, I wonder why Satan likes keeping the Sins in the dark every time? But, I'm happy to see you again, Helena."
(...)
Only two people in the clan could compare to him in talents.
it just keeps getting more better and interesting well done Author
Sounded interesting in the summary, though, after reading a few chapters i cant get interested enough in the MC to continue, but the biggest probem for me is the world building, even if the story is 2000 years in the future humanity stagnated in the 20th century, no matter how much you want to play victim and blame the world technology will aways bleed through all layers of society (just not a the same time) if not for the simple fact that we live in a capitalist economy (the same reason slavery ceased to exist, money trumps everything), so in summary the impression i have is that victim mentality not only shaped the MC but also the World
The first thing that comes to my mind when I think abt this book is “amateur” or “mediocre” writing. I know I am writing this review pretty early but I have to say this books suffers the same problem as many books on the platform. ‘Amazing premise’ but let down by lack of experience by the writer. You see it all the time where a book starts good with an amzing premise and concept and after every chapter the quality decreases, cause the author can’t express his thoughts properly.From just 22 chapter here are some of my observations1. Mc was portrayed as a calm, collected, smart and vengeful person from the prologue but by chapter 10 mc just becomes a typical anime protagonist, who is dumb and naive. He is surprised by every revelation and has to give a vocal reaction reaction to every situation. Does the mc need someone to spoon feed him always. 2. Addition of a character like Blaze, just shows the incompetence of the writer to be able to construct a smart, competent and proactive mc. Blaze is needed cause the mc can’t build a path for himself. So basically he is incompetent. The second Blaze talks we can see he is the one making every plan for the mc. Now is that really what you expect from a good book?I don’t want to be competitive but think abt the book like “Shadow Slave”, in the first arc, mc is put in a very difficult situation. I would say most people were hooked on the story the second they saw how resourceful and composed Sunny was in getting out of such situation. If instead of Blaze Ren himself decided to go to the island, because he remembered key information from the game. Now that would show that the mc is resourceful and has a strong memory and is decisive. But what we get is Blaze insulting the mc, mc acting all surprised and naive. How am I supposed to have faith in this mc?Thes presence of Blaze also shows the the confident in the author to explain mc though process to the readers, cause he needs a medium like Blaze to have conversations with the mc to express the mc’s thoughts.3. Inability to drop information with finess. In most chapters the mc comes acccor a situation and just spits out information , as in he is aware of the readers and needs to explain it them like he is a class teacher. Better books do this in a subtle manner where they use structured monologues, which give the illusion that mc is straightening his thoughts. 4. Another thing you can notice is the inability of the author to write realistic conversation., this got really irritating when he was interacting with Blaze.5. Why do we need a comedic relief side character already by chapter 20 in the form of Blaze? Its just makes the mc look like a pushover when he is insulted and demeaned by Blaze. I dont wind a weak willed mc but from chapter one you decided her was supposed to be this paragon of fear named ‘Dark’ with a no nonsense attitude. Hell even by the 3rd chapter he showed what he does to people who insult or make fun for him. I am sorry when I see mc needs someone to guide him from step 1 of the story, I know I am dealing with amature hour. I know it’s your first ever proper book but I will review it like any other book.Also if someone says, it gets better after chapter let’s say 75. Is it my job to keep the story intresting early on? You have to capture the readers attention in the first 20 chapters, not in the last 500 ones.If you ask me now, if you should read this book. Answer would be hard no, unless you really like the premise and have faith in the author. Which is don’t.
The first chapter was like ok this kind of new i never heard a storyline like that maybe its just the guy reading books and struggling with his own life but the rest of the chapters it was amazingly good the description was so on top the action was awesome and i didn't expect you to do something you did in chapter 5 not cool man not cool. But all in all it was a good book i would like you guys to give this novel a try its really good