Wow!! Great effort!! For a first timer, it is truly amazing and it is highly recommended if you want to spend some good time reading!
First thing, I love to applaud you with the concept. For me, it's new, unusual and I never heard of it before. The thing about sci-fictions today are the ideas seemed identical so reading your novel was refreshing to me. Another is I love how you already put distinctive traits for each character you presented which makes us readers easier to differentiate with them and note them individually. And what I like the most is how you lay the events perfectly that lead to string age. It helped put depth, add mystery and stir my curiosity. What I'd kindly suggest is apply flashback rather than descriptive explanation of the past(though, it's up to you especially if that's just your style) because I personally think it has more feels. Nonetheless, I had no problem with grammar or mechanics because I honestly didn't see errors on those. Ultimately, kudos! I really admire sci-fi writers because I believe they had the hardest time. Anyway, keep the fire in you burning!
Guys don't judge the story by its cover, it is a really good story with all the description needed to understand what's going on. The plot is also good...... you should really try it.
A fine read, I like the concept very much. I hope this novel continue to thrive!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I'll be frank, the English is NOT the best but I still find myself absolutely in love with this story. The Vampire/Cat combo is pretty unique, I like the idea of it and can't wait to see how it develops further in the novel! Vampires have always been cool to me and the cat combo is a exciting twist to it.Also, I really like these kind of novels where the MC has to be careful and wary of his actions that might lead to him getting caught, or even worse, killed. I think there's a brilliant balance between his suppression of power while not being SUPER OP. Most novels that go with this plot makes the MC so strong that it's boring, or hides their power for no good reason other than to be secretly powerful for no reason...I really enjoy the direction of this story, although the beginning starts off a bit rough, the developments are very interesting and I really enjoy the dynamics of the characters and school environment. **MAJOR SPOILER**I also REALLY like the creativity of the beast bloodlines like the Paper angle, and the fact these bloodlines can be improved through training thus gaining new abilities is brilliant! The mix of technology, beasts, aliens, and planetary travel is a very cool setting, which I personally like how it's all balanced.Now about the bad stuff. Because of the bad English, explanations tend to be very redundant, there's unnecessary long expositions, some words are repeated way too often in a single paragraph, the lack of vocabulary is hurting this story a lot, grammar is very bad, and the thing that bothers me the most is the random shift of tone from the author's descriptions. It's almost like a weird combination between the characters thought and the author themselves, but since there's no clear shift between them it feels out of place and ruins the mood. Fortunately, this isn't often and only happens here and there.Despite these flaws I still absolutely LOVE this novel and sincerely think this is a great story. ❤️
Deserves a five star no doubt#plsaddromance#plsnoharemu200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e u200e
If you are looking for something like release that witch, but more advanced and not harem, with realistic mechanics? Then this is the perfect one.
Five stars engineer in a world with magic done right i like the writing and also the toasters im still reading so ill update if neces sary
I still can't understand what is going on in this story. It has too much going on throughout it. I'm sorry but I will be deleting this from my library. Good luck with your stories.
For the love of god and everything you believe or don't believe in: don't be foolishly swayed like I was by the water army who sings praises to this novel. It starts out decievingly well and has a good premise, and manages to go strong for a little while before brazely dropping the act and showing its true colors.Quick summary: mc is an incomprehensible moron who gets praised to highest heaven as the Supreme Genius Stragegist for having a half-decent/obvious plan once in a blue moon; as for the other 99,99% of the screentime he whiteknights around collecting bimbos in distress, getting his arse handed to him EVERY. SINGLE. TIME., only to be bailed out by unexplained coincidense / "awakened instincts" that are never mentioned again / enemies suddenly gaining a new set of chromosomes in exchange for half of their IQ / convenient moment of luckyness / deus ex machina (this time literally) / plot armor / a random loli that in a single second gains more power than mc ever had and finishes off a boss with a single lvl.1 fireball (yes, seriously).Have mercy on your nerve endings and spleen, just don't read it.
I like it? Nono I love it? YesssI adore it? Of courseeeeeThe story the development the difference girls and boys in the story everything
Here it is the author! A shameless review.This novel belongs to the series called The Criminals. And it is obvious because of the name. Anyway, this story it will totally different from the first one because this plot it is happening on the Sapphire Island, an artificial island were a prison and a small village it is located. Now, this artificial islands it is completely different from Ruby City and Garnet City because of the two things mentioned earlier.On this series you will meet Lenard, together with a new Rodriguez, and two new characters, Henry and Abou. Now these people are here for different reason, but they have the same goal, get stronger to survive or try your luck to escape this place.