This book deserve more than a five star rating.adventure , magic and the plot has so much potentials! The story line is superb,one of the best book months genre.All I can say is keep it up!
This story is very intersting loving the pacing and the MC I am drawn in great job Author I recommend this book
Too many things to complain about in this "novel". Heres my review :)
.................nothing............. devoid of good content..... like your novel........................................
You said this was your first novel so I hope you'll read through this criticism and try to improve your future writing for the better. Please reply if you want to discuss anything.
You need to finish up some of the arcs of the story and kill off some of the side characters since nobody cares about them. For instance the Venomshade assassination arc should've ended long ago with all the mysteries behind it being uncovered. Adding mysteries on top of mysteries out of nowhere along with relentless and constant action is not a good way to pace your story. You need to divide it into segments, arcs if you will which each have a clear ending and beginning where the mysteries and drama and action of each are solved. This prevents the excessive and annoying pileup of random characters and random events which get while humorous at the beginning merely get annoying after a while.
Furthermore, the pacing of the novel is a tad ridiculous as event after event happens for seemingly no apparent reason merely bringing more confusion and chaos into the story. You make the world you're building seem so small at times by making all the important characters surround and revolve around the mc which leaves no further development later into the story and honestly make what could be a large and interesting world seem tiny and bland.
This brings me to the next flaw which are the blatant plot holes within the novel. These are a major issue within the novel which jad me scratching my head quite a couple times. For instance why is it you can just bring the soul of the planet away from its home with absolutely no consequences. Why is it that divine bloodlines and divine god bloodlines seem to pop up from nowhere even though they're abdurdly overpowered and supposedly rare. How does Fang Lin remember getting bullied when he was younger even though he was the spoiled young master bullying everybody. Why is it that planet souls aren't more secretly guarded by the sect who obtains them so they can be exploited, or alternatively fought over far more bitterly. After all those who control the soul basically rule the planet and after all no cultivator is truly good every single one of them is ruthless in futthering their cultivation, just look at CNs. If devourers are just defected planet souls why don't powerful practitioners perform experiments trying to create devourers and enslave them for their purposes? Why is Fang Lin to trusting of everybody and seems to think that people aren't decieving or exploiting him(more of a character flaw)? If people can take soul binding oaths or swear things on their soul why isn't this used more often in the world, this seems to be a major flaw as it should be extremely difficult to swindle people with the addition of these omniscient oaths after all just have people take oaths not to lie. You need to implement a meth9d around these. Fang Lin claims to be extremely scared about revealing his bloodline and claims it'd be a disaster if people knew yet it seems.to get leaked almost every 5 chapters. So many people know it's a wonder that it isn't public knowledge. He needs to take far more care in keeping it a secret after all people who know about it have the potential to exploit him with their knowledge. Why does he just tell Tang Ya about his bloodline? He should be far more concerned about the secret spreading. Why doesn't Fang Yu considering killing Andromeda and taking the inheritance. Perhaps it can't be taken, but at least have her consider it give and explanation for the benefit of the readers. How is it that out of the numerous powerhouses-all with their own various trump-cards that died all lost to Wang Hao easily in the Underworld competition. For that matter how was he able to rob them by threatening their life when they could just unseal their cultivationa dn get DQed easily saving both their life and possessions. Why is it thay anybody is able to become the Yama's successor leaving the seat open to exploitation by anybody including the Yama's enemies. These are just a few of the kore blatant flaws I can remember off the top of my head right now
In addition to all this the characters at times also seem completely one dimensional if not contradictory. For instance Wang Hao is purely the perverted master, he purely wants his own harem and seems to pursue nothing but teaching occasionally and building his harem. He needs more character built into him, for instance a more sinister plot such as exploitation of Fang Lin's bloodline by actually stealing some of his cultivation or vitality, etc.... After all it wouldn't make sense for him to not use the goldmine in front of him since all cultivators in CNs are completely ruthless. Xiao Ya's personality is almost pure lust, Tang Li's is merely the annoying child, Fang Xiushang is the arrogant master, Xuer is the loyal wife, etc... These characters need more backstory or sinister intent to them befitting a cultivation novel. For instance Xiao Ya could be merely manipulating Fang Lin to use as an attack dog for her sect while instilling loyalty to her and his fellow disciples within him. Fang Xiushang could be merely putting on a facade since he's merely a puppet of the Fang clan and isn't truly meant to be the successor. In addition the characters in this story seem to always obtain things easily such as Fang Lin's breakthrough being described as simply exceptional or such. We should see the charscters struggle for resources over tens of chapters and plot and scheme against others to survive and thrive.
On this note Fang Lin's character is quite annoying at times. For instance sometimes he is against killing and at others he is seemingly ruthless such as against Ling Tian. We need to see a gradual character change from innocence to cruel and heartlessly evil as he experiences life in the cultivation world after all only the ruthless succeed in cultivation. This can be done through timeskips or major events. We *should* see Fang Lin becoming crueller and more ruthless for example later in the story he might try and exploit innocent people such as Tang Li to further his own cultivation. This would be an interesting character development that should be added to orevent the mc from becoming 1 dimensional and static.
Finally you need to add detail into the story. Even small details help such as the weather during certain major events or a little backstory. But you especially need to add detail to the cultivation process, especially major differences between high ranking gods and immortals, since we as the reader don't always understand what is required to advance or how the mc should struggle to obtain certain things for advancements. People also want to see different cultivation methods as this adds interesting elements to the story. For example body cultivation or blood arts or buddhisr sutra, etc.. used to advanced cultivation.
Hopefully this critique helps you improve your writing. Hope you looked through it and agreed with me on at least some stuff and will try to improve on it. Sorry if this came off rude or offensice, it wasn't meant to be, it merely was meant to help you out with your first novel. Good luck and have fun writing.
I just finished volume 1 and there are no spoilers below :)I’m honestly blown away. There were some mistypes along the way, but I don’t think I’ve been so captivated by a book in a while. The writing style was refreshing to say the least, and usually when an author hides important plot information from me (the reader) I get a bit irritated at how obvious it is they are going to use it for some dumb reason and ruin the story. This was definitely not the case here. I actually enjoyed being led by the nose during this read. It felt like the author had a well planned and thought out story before they started putting It onto a page, and I really appreciated that. It made me look forward to that little bit of information the author might drop every chapter, and I didn’t want to skim or skip chapters (like I might usually do during other reads ?) because I was actually invested in what I was reading (unlike most book where I can predict the story 10 chapters ahead ?).****************************************Long story short this book is awesome so far, and even if I don’t find myself finishing this one, I will definitely be keeping track of this author and their works!! I recommend anyone else do the same. It’s harder and harder to find quality work that makes you want to write a long review anymore.****************************************
hmm... such a good novel.. but why!! why!! there's no new chapter!!! ???? the author.... I demand a 100 bonus chapter..
I read until 46. The translation quality dropped after 40. The final nail in the coffin for me was the “level 20 gear was less expensive than level 15 gear.” This made no sense. He is the ONLY character in the entire game world that is at level 20 and others are not only pulling level 20 gear from level 13-15 mobs, but people are just selling it for cheap. There are several issues with the novel that can be overlooked, but with a bad translation and bad logic, I cannot continue on. Good luck all readers.
The writing quality is ok but not especially great.
The updates are sometimes stable sometimes not...
The storry development is not especially bad, but does not make much sense eather.
Characterdesign is the big problem of the storry. Characters seem to make their choices only to bring forward the plot and do not have their own motives.
The Ideas for the world is an slightly original esper setting. Sadly the premis ruins the rest of the setting.
HOLY MOLLY THIS IS ACTUALLY GETTING TRANSLATED!
Nice, I've read the Mtl but stopped as it reached a territory where even me, a veteran of mtl, had a hard time understanding. Pretty nice it's getting translated .
What sort of Chinese corruption is this? There were plenty of other novels in trial read that had much more support then this novel. This novel will eventually fall into obscurity, they could have atleasted picked a novel that was better received, but we got this.
Does anyone know what happened to the translations of Grasping Evil? I really liked this novel, but then it would only show the first paragraph or so of the actual chapter and then a repeat of previous chapters. Now the novel hasn't been translated in a few months. What is up with the translators?
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