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Lots of spelling, lexical and grammatical mistakes.. Sometimes it is hard to understand the meaning of the sentence, often misspelled he/she/his/hers, kind/king etc. A lot of repeatability, repeating words, repeatedly, saying the same again and again, then repeat it. Definitely needs an editor. Story development is something subjectively, it is a bit slow for my liking, but it is a good story and it could raise into something great, while character development is pretty good, yet not too fast or too deep, you can feel the characters and there is a lot of space left for their development. As for world background 45 chapters deep, I know almost nothing. It's some casual city [suggestion], guess it is something reader has to create while reading. As for stability of updates I have just started yesterday, seeing in early chapters in author notes saying (2 a day, then 10 a week, then 5 a week, 12,4,7,20,1... For god's sake couldn't it be juse when you have time even one a week would be enough if not announced 10 a week. Author (yes actually author) is writing 4-5 or maybe more idk. novels at the same time, not good enough quality even asking for donations under every single chapter. *I am quiting*. Please edit your plain texts, concentrate on one or two novels at a time, keep the good story and chapters, maybe add a single detail either on VR and real world and I will be more than happy to continue reading and donate.
I liked this novel. I really did. I wouldn't of minded it going premium, but immediately upon going premium, 100+ chapters that were previously open to read got placed behind spirit stones. So **** this book, **** the greed that leads to this type of ****, and **** everyone involved with making 100+ FREE FUCKING CHAPTERS GOING BEHIND A GODDAMNED PAYWALL.
What's with this novel about???????????????
It’s been fun reading so far looking forward to more updates ❤️ character development have smooth and nice
it's a good story but while reading at beginning it is similar to The Authors Pov novel
The MC is not edge lord and thank god it is not a system novel. Book is good. Atleast Give it a try before passing judgement. My first issue is pacing. The pacing is too fast paced and stabilized somewhere around 50 chapters. Hope author continues it that way otherwise it feels like watching a YouTube video on 4x speed. Second issue is main characters are training day in and day out. There is not enough break. From readers POV it would too overwhelming as they are productive every chapter posted. To offside it, show how MC and similar are interacting like going outside doing something entertaining etc. it kinda takes readers mind off but the transition should be organic. MC is becoming too OP too fast. Even without system cheats MC is becoming OP too fast. Better make the MC settle for sometime and make readers adjusted. Naruto is a story which takes more chapters to fully explore. So it is best if author takes it slow and explores more. Author specific:- If you are serious about writing this fic, Try to look in reddit sub threads for novels with high intense fight narration. It might help writing more flushed out fight scenes. Fight scenes are the bread and butter of Naruto fic. The story premise would be same for all the thousands of fics but if you want your fic to stand out you need to bring in more to the table. Overall it is 4 out of 5. Let me know about the criticism author if you have read the review.
OKAY, it seems my journey ended here. Thank you for the story. I guess I don't have a choice but to accept it since I don't like your decision. It was very enjoyable to read. Thank u?.
Read till Ch 334 and i have to say im extremely dissapointed with the author. It was one of the best novels i have read so far,interesting with good plots with a little bit of slice of life, BUT... in the newer chapters the author stretching the chapters like theres no tommorow with so much repetitive details that it becomes impossible to read with no story progression,it becomes a chore much less enjoyable. For example.. The protagonist tries to do something and had a thought....proceed to write 3 chapter explaining his thought with useless descriptions wHICH are so repetitive and boring. It could have been one of the best novel i would recommend to friends but i have to drop it now.
I'll give 4 stars on everything simply because you're an original author, and your book has potential, however, Mark's arrogant internal monologue just ended up giving me a headache, his character that didn't fit the descriptions you gave at the start made him even more annoying to the point where I had to give up at the end of the rooftop chapter, and just skim read ahead to at least give a reasonable review... the main things that led to my problems with Mark are that quite simply, nothing about him makes sense, he's unusually handsome yet apparently is massively depressed, self confidence is extremely important in making someone seem attractive...
the man was seriously considering suicide, I get him wanting to live because the zombie apocalypse is fascinating, but if that's the case, he'd either entirely forget his desire to die, or spend some time coming to terms with it, not mention it every few minutes for you to seemingly, bolster your word count, which is honestly what the first chapters felt like...
then, there's his arrogance that seems to shine through when speaking to the woman that saved his life because he stupidly said he wanted to fight some zombies, then decided to run around a sofa instead, while still acting like he's freaking action man, and seemingly, no-one even blinked an eye to it...
the hints at him being a gamer in the first chapter seemed really important, then his actions didn't even slightly follow that trend, a gamer would come to terms with there being zombies fast, sure, but there are other important things they'd remember too, like if there's a corpse twitching on the ground, stab it in the head, they wouldn't just loot first, and let the zombie turn in the same room as them...
I initially wanted to read this to return the favor of shadowlord checking out my novel but now I can't drop it....Awesome write up shadowlord keep up the good work. Awesome cultivation novel. I'm giving this a full five stars.
Author, May your ideas never run out.
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At first it may seem like this is like SAO but it is lot more different. The MC is genius in his own right. The story so far is mind blowing, combined with the excellent writing, this book is literal immersive. Hope to see more chapters!!!!