The first thing I'll only say (due to the fact I also have bad grammar as well so I'm in no position to critics your grammar) is to capitalize the title. Its common sense for a novel to be capitalized if you don't. It's most likely be ignored even if you have a good story.
When she came out of the lecture hall. She realized what just happened and how she got her dad worried about her. She promised before leaving for college that she'll be a brave girl and will manage everything on her own but in reality she couldn't even get past her first day of college without crying.
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"Surat? Mengapa kau bungkus dengan warna norak seperti ini?" protesnya sambil membolak-bakan benda itu.
The battlefield was a mess of corpses, blood and the ripe stench of perspiration. They never say how truly awful the smell of battle was. If they fought any longer, men might begin keeling over from the miasma alone. Both sides had seen heavy losses. Both sides had clearly lost entire shield-walls. It was a mess. Any semblance of organisation had long since departed the field. This battle would not be decided upon the earthly plane, but instead by the gods themselves. Still, Brenjulf couldn't help wonder why Pyrelig had failed to join the battle. He must have been able to see the need to assist.
The figure shook his head, "I don't even have to bother with you the moment she dies you will follow soon after".
I think I put in that kick more strength than I had to, I didn't adapt to my new strength after my last training after all, I approached Seraf then said "Can you let me examine you? I am a medical shinobi too!" He looked at me surprised for an instant then said "Ok" I put my hands on his abdomen and concentrated my chakra sens on that area for about ten seconds then said "It's an old injury that reopened when I kicked him!" The two were surprised at my statement then I began my treatment. Healing hand was good at external injuries but with chakra sens I could heal even internal injuries and after half an hour I finishing my treatment. We stood up then I said to him "You're not injured anymore but you have to rest at least for a week to completely heal!" He thanked me and walked out of the training ground, I stood there with the clan head then he brock the silence "Seraf is one of the strongest and experienced shinobis in the clan, beating him means you're qualified to be my opponent" He looked at me, and I felt like it was a beast that was looking at me not a human, it was the first time in my life feeling this type of pressure, the man overwhelmed me with just a glance.
Stock Market Crash (1929): Began on October 24, 1929, and was the most devastating stock market crash in the history of the United States. 12 year great depression.
[The User is in a Critical state!]
Looking at her both Elsa and Eve had a werid expression on their face while watching her acting all shy, which maked her look cute.
*ding*dong*
Prestigious kings cafeteria is located at the outskirt of the school Main Building and waiters could be seen moving round in numbers serving different varieties of foods.