Writing Quality : 6/10
But i love the monsters, characters and curious how this might be goin. I think its almost same with overlord, sao, log horizon.
I didn't like it at first. But the more i read, the better it got. Maybe the son hould have a more active role. Over all i hope theres a sequel.
Hey Author here,
Yes i am just gonna just go and shamelessly give it a five star.
Well this is my second book my first one was somewhat famous but not gonna lie i gave up on it because i started writing it on a hunch so well this one's more thought after and hopefully is better than my previous book.
I hope you enjoy reading it as much as i do writing it.
Do give me reviews about what you think.
-Author Out
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It's a pity to see that even a garbage level novel here can get an average rating of 4.7 stars. May be these Chinese readers would become diehard fans if they ever got to read a proper novel with all the required ingredients (ofcourse they should be able to keep aside their racist prejudice before that ).
Expected more from this.Great concept , but destroyed by author by his style of writing.which gave me serious headache.The word handsome and ,and first person view of MC with disastrous greatly flawed mind and mentality is fucking point of this novel.Sorry author not for me. Reading this giving me head ache.
The story is great! Your writing style is unique. The story is easy to understand and is imaginable. I will wait for the other chapters. Keep it up!
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Well. First things first, the grammar could use some work. It is readable, although I can't deny that it hurts my eyes and this is coming from a brasilian writer who also struggles with english grammar! The main plot also seems to be initially just your everyday typical VR novel although it quickly switched to the stereotype reincarnation with a system. The MC just seems to be one of those dumbasses and probably he is gonna end up just like those clichê protagonists. For the good points, although the grammar is pretty bad I can't say it's the worst I've ever seen since I saw things that could make anyone feel the desire to drink bleach and put clorox on their eyes, so congrats because your novel is nowhere near close those garbages. Despite this story being quite my cup of tea I can say this author has a lot of potential for future growth so I'm looking forward to your future stories. Everyone needs to start somewhere, even the first chapters of my first novel are also pretty bad.Sorry for being harsh on the review but I decided to be honest here, it is going to surely help you in the future.
I really like the way you described the ML as well as the background. One can easily imagine and feel this in their mind. The idea of the story is also good so keep going. I recommend others also to read it. A worth reading novel.????⭐
Shameless review by author here.There are many things than can be improved but I'll give five star to everything since the author is more or less as shameless as the MC here.