So ill start with the postives and ill work into the things i think need workYou have a good system style for the system genre i like the style of rapid growth with small bonuses collected from multiple worlds styleI love your world building so far you could probably be a very talented DM for dungeons and dragons and i respect the quality Your male characters overwhelmingly are well written and varied even the assholeish Second heroCons- mostly just to deal with the AMOUNT of harem girls you seem to have planned its overwhelming and itll be impossible to even remeber their names i think if you are seriously planning for 60 girlsAnd this brings up the other topics even the “main Wife” vibe character just screams generic harem fodder your female characters need some variance because even the stealth girl in the second world i literally saw the begrudging attraction first chapter after their meeting i can accept fate makes these girls fall for protagonist but it needs some more finesse to not just have the worst self fulfillment fanfic vibe
This honestly has no business being a free read with how good it is. Trust papa Djab-Djab and go read it - it will be your loss if you don't.
It's really a great fiction and it's progressing very well! I like the way author explains it in detail. Keep writing and never give up! You're doing so well, hope your dreams will come true.
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