interesting novel, with slow pace, fleshing to see an mc who is not op, but with all good things comes bad things, the mc is personality is pretty bland, he is not completely cold blooded but he is cold in a way, he doesn't seem to have personal feelings what so ever, he is mostly calculating situation almost like a machine and human hybrid, he is bullied but he doesn't seem to feel any anger nor care which is weird, the mc has no magic, just minions, but in the world he is in there are people who can avoid death, tho he has enchanted things but he personally isn't that strong without sacrificing his memories further more turning into emotionless pupet.
though it is a little boring I'm gonna keep reading cause why not,finish what I have started.
Descriptive novels is a quality novel but this novel while beginning is done really well I gets a bit over board as plot progressed.
While the mc seems full with emotions and personality, it is really empty as mc seems to be a programmed robot with each decisions and actions done without any real thought.
Also different perspective being jumbled without any structure and flow, felt like reading this and that jumping between back and forth...
Is like watwatching a movie made with best visual technology and plot but without colour and sound at the same time with random rewinding and forwarding.
I like the novel
Decent read .I liked it. One of the better trail reads.
The premise is simple to understand and follow. It's a little fast paced in the beginning, but it gets better with more chapters
I love the mystery and excitement of this novel.
I can't wait for the next part of the story.
I wonder if the main character meets some new people.
Does anyone know the raws for this book?……………….……………………………..
already been translated, why it came out again and with different title. what is webnovel trying to do??
I hope the author don't drop this novel and at least make it to at least 50 chapters cause I'm loving this looking forward for future chapters
This is a breath of fresh air. I like the way this novel is going and look forward to future chapters. Thank you for the wonderful creation of entertainment and the time you put into this novel.
Fantasy with Video game, and system, and little bit sci-fi? I can't imagine how wonderful is it. I hope you can do a magic regarding to your plotline
I've read up to around chap 600 and I definitetly will continue waiting for the updates. I really like this novel, and I praises say it all. However, I wanna leave something that may be of help for the author, and here are a few recommendations:
1. The writing could really make use of some editing, such as on some of the common word spellings i.e. "could" instead of "cloud." Also, some words were misplaced i.e. "like sword" instead of "sword like." Another thing would be the lack of "a" and "the" such as in "I am father" instead of "I am a father."
2. Pseudo names and/or monikers need mitigation. I feel like frequently using "Young one" or "Snow Beauty" always makes the reader think "Who was that again?" Feel free to use pronouns for I think it will greatly improve the writing quality (and also reduce the time needed to type haha.) If author-san still wants to use the aliases, I would prefer them being used as frequently as the real names in the narration, as that will give us time to imprint the name on our heads.
3. Being direct in writing flares up our imaginations more than just leaving it for us to imagine (quite ironic no?) There are times when author-san used "Obviously you know the reason why!" and I felt nice when I really knew it, but felt frustrated when I didn 't know resulting to me not grasping the events. It may be spoonfeeding, but I think being repetitive sometimes would be a great help.
4. In line with #3, the descriptions could really use more specific-ness (And I really like that author-san got better in describing characters in the latest chapters.) The places where the scene happens need a bit more detail such as the color of the room, the placement of the furnitures/obstacles, the POV location, the sights as the eyes extend toward either left or right, etc. You can also utilize mentioning widths and lengths (numbers don't hurt; more so in moderation.) Also you can elaborate on the number of enemies too, and the exact number that died/are left. In terms of describing powers, it can also be a bit useful to use "the shockwave reached 3 kilometers" and the world sizes may also utilize this by comparing to the size of the Earth.
5. The world building is a bit confusing for me. It might help by releasing a helpful chapter for the essential information. I still don't understand a few of the power aquisition and improvements up till now (maybe my comprehension is bad too I guess hehe)
6. There are a few plotholes, but all stories have them right? Just don't forget what happens to the people/buildings/world around the event portrayed. Don't hesitate to mention how the roof collapsed, how buildings in a 100 km radius got blown, how a lot of people ran when this guy appears etc etc. They really get us to feel the events.
7. In line with #6, the R-18 scenes are a little inconsiderate HAHA. There are just times when the MC is walking here then boom the R-18 scenes come and I don't know how the hell they came from the shop to the dark alley.
In summary: Don't hide anything from us author-san. Pour everything you imagine into writing. We want to see what you see. We want to know what you know. I f*cking love this novel and I will don anything to help it get even more f*cking good.
Love from a loyal reader of yours~
P.s. If I have more suggestions, I will reply them here as well :D Keep writing!