“Did you really think that killing me would be enough to make me die?” -Anos Voldigoad.
Poor Seveni
This new chick Lin Jiaxuan better keep it moving, we don't want Song Jia to be displeased
I agree with the first commenter. The story has changing character names, numerous typos, and mixed-up pronouns. The translation is not great, but it's better than machine translation. The story's pace is decent, and overall, I enjoyed it. It's my first time encountering a story where all four characters are reincarnated, with three males and one female lead. The female lead also undergoes transmigration. However, I found it occasionally boring and noticed inconsistencies in their character development. For instance, they're powerful but don't always use their abilities effectively. There's a point where I dislike the male lead for wanting to hurt the female lead to prevent her death, which is ironic.
Chapter 1-10 and im already at the door. This novel is so weird and all over the place. Is this written by a 10 yr old? Such weird plotline.
My best friend tell me the story
The Su Family are so annoying and always third wheel ugh. They always doubt Hu Chenhuan wtf they're so annoying.
I love that this story has a veteran as mc, with no cheats but his own skills. So no hidden teachers that make him even more op. What I love about this story is that the mc is in fact a teacher himself to newbies with lots of potential. This story starts withmc alone, and you will read his journy in the tenth server and back to the top, while he makes new friends and had new teammates along the way. Great story.
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Tl:DR "meh". Solid C-.
Let me preface this review by stating the obvious: "THIS NOVEL DESPERATELY NEEDS AN EDITOR". now that that is out of the way I will continue.
The bad: poor grammar, poor capitalisation / punctuation (often none, at all) and comically long run on sentences (I think I saw one paragraph long sentence with 6 "and"s in it back around chapter 10). The author is overly reliant on Autocowrong and it shows. How the novel flows would suggest that the author is not a native English speaker, and if that is the case then kudos for your effort friend, but you need an editor.
There is a gaming term called Ludonarrative Dissonance, which describes the disconnect between a games narrative (the story) and the gameplay. In this work the author creates a similar dissonance by introducing a "genius scientist" which is overly reliant on his system and fails to have a single original thought. The overly ****** dialogue compounds this. It is hard to convince readers that your MC is a genius when he speaks in either short and choppy or long run on sentences.
The meh: what could be fantastic fight chapters and power gains are glossed over instead of expanded on. The lack of detail transforms the elements which this genre typically does best into fluff; glossed over and quickly forgotten.
The good: all the things which make this genre great are present; there is a solid foundation to build on.
Closing thoughts: please, please... find an editor.
Everyone looking for a I-got-betrayed-and-reincarnated bull**** novel should leave right now. The short stories and chapters are quite good and has more plot than any of the 1000-chapters-recycled-every-50ch-plot novels right now.
神级顿悟系统
only 14 chapters dont know if its ongoing or dropped................................................................................................