At first glance, it seems like an original novel, written by an English-speaking person. It has the same styles a lot of English sci-fi novels have and some more. But then, you see the character introductions and you're like, "Oh wait, this is a Chinese novels!" That's how I felt at least. Stuff is happening kinda fast currently within the story but it's still just barely keeping at an alright pace for these kinds of novels. It's pretty decent so far but this is only based on the first few chapters so I might change my opinion later on. So...I guess we just have to wait and see as the plot develops. ?
So far so good. Hopefully, it will continue to get better.
i didn't like the first chapter before rebirth, too flipped out for my taste with forced experiments on humans etc. I kept reading though and like the more normal contents with the FLs everyday life and reevaluation and changes from her former life much better. i liked her not investing in stocks as she did not remember which went well in her former life, sure, because which normal girl not into stocks would know? i'll hang on a bit more and see how it develops. the language is not bad but could do with some proof reading.
If you wanT To know truly my opinion then i will say author destroyed his good story. 1st of all can you clarify us that are you writing novel pr biography? when i read i don't get the feling of reading novel i feel i am reading a biography. and every character is behaving lije a robot. even though they are showing emotion i have to say i fell you didn't get depth of a character & the story is getting rushed. power system is also have a problem you can understand by going ch 8. & technic how they work you didn't say. you didn' t use system efficiently. lastly world background? there is none . which empire? who rule what? it might have at letter ch but sorry i got bored of reading same theme. but if you solve every problem then i can say this will be a greate story..
I see that the story is discontinued probably because it's missing a lot of details. I love overpowered stories like this, but it's like you went to one subject to the next without hardly any context. You need to add more details to the characters and what he's doing. where's the villain of story you mentioned a tyrant magician, but I can hardly believe if he is attacking nearby territories that he would simply leave the mc alone to build his kingdom? I get that it appears that you're trying to create a slice of life story, but you are too fast. Keep jumping from one thing after another with hardly any details. if you plan on redoing this book, I suggest that you make sure that there are details in the novel.
The first chapter introduces the main character and her love interest, and there is some foreshadowing. The plot is interesting. The idea and setting of the novel is great.
Thanks for the interesting story
The humour is something 10-13 year old children will enjoy. It's like Phase 4 MCU with comedy overdone and at the wrong time. The writing quality is good. It's actually a 5/5 star novel if the author got rid of the cringe elements.
as your fellow countrymen im very proud(lol) i hope this book gets top 1,I love this book btw. Grabe mag English dko na alam sasabihin hahahabasta support lang ako dito.Good luck sayo!
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Good writing skills with a talent for description. It can be read by anyone,the japanese elements are explained briefly and clearly.Lots of suspense even from the first chapter. Well done,keep going author.
A page turner indeed. Vivid descriptions and unfolding of events keep the reader goingCan't wait for the next chapter ????The writer sends us to the world of crime filled with suspense and pure thrill. The points of view are well distinguished and give way for proper character development.This is an ultimatum.