I like how the story is progressing so far but I'll suggest you to proofread the chapters once as there are a few grammatical errors. I've pointed out a few though. Anyway, great job! Keep writing!
Definitely a story with a heart. The MC has a very tender, painful backstory that will tug at your heartstrings. Her parents are just amazing though, I must say. The MC herself is very well portrayed, actions are congruent to her age. Her innocence also comes through in the writing. The writing itself is very good, only minor tense issues that do not take away from the story. The emotional core of the story is what hooks you on to it. Thank you, author. It will remain in my library as I look forward to reading the entire story. Great work!
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The story is quite good, though the grammar is a mess.
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Just started. Only read a few chapters . But I am already thinking of dropping it. The grammar is horrible. And from the comments I have seen, the author hasn't hired an editor or done anything to fix this for the last 8 months. For those not bothered by horrible grammar give it a try. For me, it's a deal-breaker.
Excellently written!!! Usually,I am not a fan of system novels, but this book has sparked my curiosity and I ended up reading. It was totally worth it!!! The plot itself appears promising and the characters are well written. Most of the system novels does not show much detailings about background setup or the world- but this story just blew my mind with the portrayal of the world and the main characters. Author have an excellent command over the language and I wonder why it shows low views for this gem? Kudos to the author, keep up the good work ???
I interested to the storyline you want to make, I want to know more about the mc.please update more frquently
a good book with a beautiful world in it. I hope BugatiCatForm can keep his continues update.But sometimes I wonder this book about matrial art fantasy or romance and the love story between Anna and Moku to much sugar for my taste. (lol)I really don't know how the writter can keep up with the progres of story' because it's too much complex and i hope the complexity become this novel advantage not a weakness
I Like the Novel but where is the author???Hello?? Is this dead? if so then that's too bad. But if the author somehow decided to continue this in the future, Please contact me.09** —*2* –***0