Like the story and MC so far. MC is witty and smart. Will check in again after the novel has more chapters. Many authors drop novels on this website.
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Alright, this small review is needed for reader that are about to approach the book. You aren't convinced at all by the uninformative synopsis, and even at the cost of minor spoiler want to know more about it.You already now that I'm a newbie author and English is not my main language. However you shouldn't be having many problems in understanding my writing, since many others already read the book.Still beware that the first ten chapters might be tough to read.SPOILERS AHEAD(not much though)Now who exactly is Xeno, he started off as weak being obliged to work hard every day to survive. An incident suddenly happens, death is slowly approaching him. To save his life he will accept an offer from a mysterious being, changing himself completely.Received a new body, Xeno becomes another kind of existence entirely, a more powerful and dangerous one.Yet what he believed to be true strength, will demonstrate to be weakness once again.However he chose not to abandon himself, but to keep believing in his convinctions. From here only the truly evil lies ahead. The ruthlessness necessary to shape everything in his path, for himself and the ones he holds dear. I hope you know have a more clear opinion about what to expect from the book.Disclaimer:Beware 'hold dear' does not mean romance, because he won't consoder anyone in a romantic way.
Very good development! Very good development! Very good development! Very good development! Very good development! Very good development! Very good development!
Cool idea! I have never though of it like that! The characters are developing so finely and I can read it for all day since I like the story of galaxy.
This is probably one of the harder reviews I've written. To give away the ending, Spirit Immortal comes in the the low B/high C range for me, but I'm pretty brutal with my reviews so that's actually a pretty high score for me. The difficulty comes in that the way I would score the later chapters are vastly different from how I would rate the early chapters. If I was to break it down by volumes the first two volumes score in the D range, volumes three and four are B's while volumes five and six both rate a solid A.Spirit Immortal is honestly a fairly sweeping tale set with a cultivation backdrop. I phrase it like that specifically because even though the MC is always working towards a higher cultivation, it isn't the cultivation as his goal it is instead a tool he uses to measure himself by.The main flaw is that Spirit Immortal is a Character Driven novel where the main character doesn't start with a clear goal. He goes as far to describe himself as a leaf carried by whichever way the water flows. This isn't bad but it's much harder to write in the early chapters then if you were writing a Story Driven novel, where the plot moves along because of an external factor, i.e. an enemy army is coming or you have to defeat the demon king.The comments on the early chapters highlight this indirectly, where people attack the author for useless details and pointless arcs. Reading through the whole story, these comments aren't true as you encounter a similar amount of details and varied arcs in other novels, but it's how the readers perceive the story since they are reading it 'in the moment'. What it actually is is a problem in pacing and *******. Since the motivation comes from the character but the character is still discovering the world around them it's hard to generate the appropriate feeling of ******* in order to carry the story. The way you mitigate this is with foreshadowing and switching character viewpoints in order to portray what's happening external to the MC that will move the story forward and create a sense of crisis. The ******st way for me to phrase is it that it's ok if your main character is aimless and doesn't seem to know where he's going, but you can't let your story seem that way.However this problem disappears to a large degree by the beginning of volume three, the momentum which the story has built starts to sweep up the reader. However this also means you have to read a hundred chapters in to get to juicy parts of the story, which makes it a hard novel for me to recommend. There are a lot of absolutely brilliant characters in this story, but you have to take your time to get to know them and the world they build around themselves.Since the author has stated that he isn't interested in participating in the premium program on Webnovel I'm actually going against the advice I've given to every other author here: Don't go back and rewrite your story, it *always* turns out *bad*. In this case I would actually encourage the author to hire either a Developmental Editor or a Story Coach to help revise the story and then publish it electronically himself. Alternatively just treat it as your 'first million words' and keep going.
This is pretty bad. The MC is a Vampire with the mindset of a japanese isekai protag. Again. A Vampire. Who acts like he wants to be a messiah for humans. Plot is extremely forced, author comes up with the most convenient circumstances ever. His first platinum box was found because, as a Vampire, infiltrating a NON GUARDED NOBLE RESIDENCE BY THE WAY, he tripped over a flippin chair and accidentally found a hidden room. When he visits the black market? He gets stopped by a human and she says she isn’t scared because he doesn’t look to be a bad person and asks him to save her daughter. By the way, according to the author, said ‘good vampire’ is wearing a black cloak, coming out of the BLACK MARKET, and is flying. In my opinion, this author has no business writing a story on Vampires. But, oh well.
I keep coming back to the visual of this scene. A private room in a hotel, a table full of spoiled rich kids, Zhong Suian standing there in her uniform, and then the whole power dynamic shifting in real time. The author doesn't give us pages of description, but the few details they do include are incredibly effective. The damaged private room door. The bottle of wine that costs "over two yuan." Manager Zhang's dark expression. Sister Ying covering her mouth and giggling. The two security guards appearing "at just the right moment" to drag Sister Ying away. And then Zhong Suian walking out, changing clothes, getting into a car, and immediately running into her roommates at a phone store. The scene transitions are so smooth — you're never lost, you always know where you are, and the author uses setting to reinforce the power dynamics. The hotel is her domain by the end. The phone store becomes her victory lap. What I love most is the contrast between the cramped, chaotic private room and the bright, clean Apple store. One is a cage of their own making, the other is a space where she has total control. The author understands that setting isn't just background — it's storytelling.
muito bom, recomendo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!............................................................................................................................
amazing story that takes u on a emotional ridezzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz mild horror
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