I normally LOVE criticizing novels! Hell, there was a time I was criticized for being too harsh to the authors due to my critiques!
But hell if I don't love this story …
A BEAUTIFUL execution of a new premise in a story, no overused reincarnation/transmigration/back-in-time or anything of the sort. A child inheriting his grandfather's empire while having to fight for his rights with his other family members (father, mother, brothers) be it in real life or in a VR game.
I normally write reviews either due to disappointment (unfortunately, on this site, this is the most prevalent review one can expect from) or potential of the story (normally due to writing quality being really bad, but its premise being way too great to ignore).
Guess what, this story falls under NEITHER.
It's got AWESOME characters, world background and story development (at least for now) and stability of updates seems to be on a daily release (again, for now).
Writing quality is also really nice; it has nicely split paragraphs and very good sentences' structures. Rich enough vocabulary and grammar is pretty nice.
The only critique the author still has to work on (for now) is proper tenses usage. He messes them up from time to time, but it is NOWHERE NEAR the mix-up most other novels on this site have. Unfortunately, due to me being me, that still warrants one less star on `Writing Quality`, making it a total of 4.
Other than that? It's 5 star for now! Making the overall rating a 4.8.
Cheers.
I love how easy it is to read and the writer just takes me along painting a vivid picture of her story, still reading it tho, on my way to chapter 3[img=recommend]
me bad at words but this good ..........
Legendary armament canon ripoff?
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Funny
Thanks for this book author. I like very much your book. And i hope you don't stop writing. And you mentioned about harem and i think one Fl is enough. But is your work and your choose. Don't let people affect your thoughts. Write the story you wanted to share. I also want to ask dou you any plan of increasing the daily updates to two. Not everyday but if you do it occasionally i would be appreciated. [img=update]
I give it 10/10 it has alot of spelling errors, but there is enough context to tell what it should be. but the story is amazing, I wish I was here when it first was written especially after I have read the next novel in the series twice now. so seeing the beginning is rather exciting. definitely worth the read and it's not terribly expensive maybe 3000 coins in total or something. do read if you enjoy the other novels. and if you havet read the other novels read this first to understand the background, or don't qnd come back after you have read it and enjoy all the references you missed.
Hey author. How are you doing?
Any reason to drop this novel? Will it continue in the future.
At last it's here..
I am sorry if I skimmed over the first chapter, but I found it really mysterious even at the beginning. And I love a mystery in the story.
-The writing quality is readable and understandable. For someone who is dumb like me in processing words, I can read it.
-The stability of updates... As an author who fails, I don't really mind the stability as long as you update and upload a chapter.
-The story development, I will still have to read more, but I don't have time for that as an author trying to achieve something. However, looking at the number of chapters, there is a story. And that's what matters.
-Character design and world background could be labeled as one, but my thoughts on it depends on the writing quality. So its as good as five stars. Good luck and God bless.
thank you so much I haven't yet read this story but I give all star I will love and enjoying when I'm read this I'm sure..my god do.i need to right 140 cha