Really good, just wish the MC didn't let the women in his life push him around. He really needs to learn to say no. His whole family women are trashy people.
The MC is incredibly unsympathetic. His actions, thinking, and behavior make him unlikable. The author's struggle to give proper scientific explanations to fantasy-like developments make the whole story awkward. I do not recommend it.
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The story so far has been really good. I've been hooked for the last couple of hours and thoroughly enjoyed it. Keep up the great work girl. ??
The description is interesting, but I have a question. Does the MC have any desire to conquer more territory or is he just trying to survive?
Post 75+ chapter binge review.First, I don't think I've made as many intra chapter comments for one story as I have today. I've been thinking about this and I think that's a reflection of my engagement with a story. And some of these elements which elicit commentary include humor, interesting plot points, and relatable characters. Which is to say that although yes, this is a sports-themed novel with some pretty standard elements (physical/skills growth, tournaments, etc.), and less than perfect editing notwithstanding, this story really has a way of drawing you in as a reader and engaging you.This is self-published work and the author doesn't appear to be a professional. But he has taken one important storytelling tip to heart and that is "Write about what you know". It's so obvious that the author not only has a very passionate and knowledgeable perspective on basketball, but it is clear that many things he is able to write about comes from personal experience.But at the end of the day all of it just comes together with good storytelling - there are interesting characters, moments of levity balanced against thoughtfulness, adequate ******* and release, and a pretty good pace to story development. Either way, I'm engaged and looking forward to following this story for a long time. Mad respect to the author for his efforts.
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Just average, went through mtl until the end, still thought stopping a few times. A few annoying moments such as repeating the same situation from point of view of MC and then other characters, just this alone could shorten the novel by 30% for sure and maybe even more. Another repetite moment is when optic brain solves everything, as opponent does something MC analysis through optic brain and just solves it, and its done. Moreover, another annoying thing is author forgetting parts of the story, not often but around 3-5 times, still impacts the experience. The ending was quite abrupt and anticlimactic, I am sure without all that repetite stuff the novel would have lasted much longer with better ending.I quite like the whole concept of assistance from a super brain in form of optic brain or some form of artificial intelligence, the best to date is Warlock of the Magus World where MC is already intelligent and the A.I. chip is just giving wings to the tiger, but in this case the writting is lacking. Still good effort
I only read until chp. 40 so i cant say how its afterwards but its quiet good, nice written and good development but there are also plot holes, the most glaring is how his identity was found out which makes no sense at all.How do you want to make a background check of an In-game character, whoes data are guarded by an high tech AI and the officials dont give out information + the hunted one gives no clues out about his identity... that is one big glaring plot hole.
this book got me hooked from the beginning,more update please
Okay so let me just say this right now — the subplot about Su Meier secretly building a compound bow is the single most satisfying thread in this entire batch. Like, on the surface it's just a girl doing farm labor, right? Boring, mundane, the kind of thing you'd expect from this genre. But then BAM, she's in her room at night wrapping rubber bands around a wooden board, testing arrows against her bed frame, and the arrow sinks completely through the wood. I literally had to pause and re-read that part because it was such a tonal shift. The author doesn't tell us WHY she needs a bow until later, but the mystery itself is what hooks you. And then the payoff — she goes hunting at noon, hits a rabbit through the heart, pins another by the leg, and casually walks back to trade game meat for snacks with Song Cili. The plot structure here is really smart because it operates on two levels: the visible level of her struggling with farm work and the hidden level of her preparing something dangerous. These two threads collide when she reveals the bow to Song Cili, and that's when the real story begins. The way the author plants the bow-building early and only pays it off much later is classic misdirection. You think this is a story about a girl learning to work hard, but it's actually about a girl who's been hiding her capabilities this whole time. What's even better is that the threshing ground itself becomes a kind of testing ground — not just for her physical endurance, but for her social navigation. She has to deal with Fang Zhaodi's passive-aggressive comments, Jiang Honglian's unexpected kindness, and the whole hierarchy of the work crew. Each interaction feels like a small plot beat that builds toward something bigger. I'm genuinely curious what happens when Song Cili finds out she's been hunting this whole time. The trade scene at the end is just the tip of the iceberg.
where's flint's story? it's unfair that you write for Liam and Isabel and not flint