Good story. I support you author so pls write the chapters fast. And qidian, seriously you need to remove this annoying restriction of 140 word.
This novel's not my cup of tea. I don't mind some plot holes but this author writes sentences as if they were directed to kids. I can't stand reading that tone, as if mocking the readers.
The introduced characters sometimes behave as if they were 5 reincarnated teenagers from modern world, not natives of the primitive world.
one of the best historical danmei i've ever read
It looks like someone review bombed this novel (a bunch of low ratings posted at the same time). It's a really good novel so it sucks that happened.
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Very cliche start, with a few ridiculous points in the plot you have to ignore. Like, MC supposed to be top military something... but only been in four years, with no contact in that time. No explanation yet. Writing is mediocre, but the plot has hope within the tropes.
Discovering this novel when it was only about 13 chapters was like finding hidden gems.
I haven't read a good novel like this in a long time.
Looking at the previous reviews, you will know that world-building is the best thing about this novel. VERY INTERESTING World building, unique and enjoyable to follow, makes you want to know more about that world. Probably the best on this platform, in my opinion. Actually, the terms used are still quite mainstream terms, such as dungeons, orc monsters, churches that govern society, and kingdom themes, just like other novels, but HECK, There is something different about this novel from the others, somehow I feel a very strong medieval atmosphere when reading this like almost the same as our medieval world but with magic in the social. I know the author has done some research to create this from reading this.
The plot is very well written, my expectations were low, but the author gave his best in the plot. I even cried in some parts (I'm the type of person who does not cry when reading books). The emotion in this story is amazing.
Character development is great!!! And everything made sense to me. The relationships between the characters are amazing. Most importantly, this novel has illustrations that make us understand each character better.
Great world building, a good plot, and good characters, and there is something different from other novels in this pf.
CONS:
grammar issue (minor). The author once said that English is not his first language, and so do I. Although I'm not perfect in grammar, I can tell that some of the author's punctuation and storytelling timing are often not good. But it's still in the acceptable stage for me. It's still an enjoyable read.
It's just that, for people who really care (or strict!) about grammar, it's better not to read this, I don't really like it when people give low ratings just because of grammar (I know it is important but this wn is still have good grammar)
If this author had a good English editor and improved the writing, this novel might be the best on the platform.
Despite the flaws, I still give it full stars because I love this wn so much.
Currently, in chapter 45, The complexity of the dungeon, the mysterious girl who makes people suicide, the anti govern, the council, the prince, and the church! The story hooked me.
The grammar is consistently bad but not to the point where you can't understand what's happening. The premise of the story is interesting and it definitely deserves more attention.
please release this novel thanks
Positive points: Your grammar is good and the sounds of objects breaking or even the sound of the clock is an interesting point in your narrative form.
Negative points: The chapters are very short; The story is very fast; It's lack consistency in the narration; The main character, so far, has no depth and no interesting personality; his friendship with Dimitri is strange; and Mr. Golden must die (yes, I hate characters who are mysterious to cause suffering in MC).
General Rating: You should pay more attention to the consistency of your story, for example, in the first and second chapter in which you present the main character is not satisfactory, the main character is an empty person, very unreal, being very difficult as a reader identify with this type of character. And the conversation between MC and Mr. Golden is annoying and unreal, I wanted to kill MC in that moment.
From what I understand, you're creating a story where MC is an innocent fool to become a powerful and ruthless "man."
However, I thought you could work more on the personality of the MC before training, showing a little of your day-to-day and prolonging the training time a bit more. In this case as you have already published the chapters, I make a suggestion, put flash back on the past of the MC, as he was an innocent fool or a fool easily fooled, also help some flash backs training, like a scavenger hunt or even an enemy made in this prison.
Another point is that you should better develop the world of your history, for there is nothing to be able to identify in what year the story goes, what are the political powers of this world, what kind of firepower does this The world has, what the geography of the world today ... That kind of thing.
I know it's your first story, but I was honest because when I wrote my first story I had no review that put these types of reviews for me, so the story became so chaotic and terrible that I deleted all chapters to reform this story someday.
Do not be angry with me for the Review, I'm just being honest, you can even disregard my opinion if you want.
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Author, Translator... Please do not drop this story. It is one of the good ones.
On a sidenote, Maybe some updates when there will be periods of inactivity, like the last 3 weeks of no updates.