Keep up the momentum
I love the energy and writing style
Is this a shameless author review? Yes. But, trust me when I say that this novel is 100% worth your time if you like fresh ideas! I'm not super experienced as an author, but I want to improve and develop to make this an amazing story.
The story is nice. The mc has actually been portrayed as evil. The childhood part was also good. The pace is great and the story doesn’ t feel rushed. More chapters would be preferable.
Dont read here and spend your money on this book. You are just being ripped off by this disgusting translator. Take note, the current latest chapter of this novel is Chapter 208, that is in premium. I have checked the raws and chapter 208 is different. In the raws, what is shown in chapter 208 is in chapter 135. You are not getting your money's worth for the chapter purhases. This is blatant riff off.
This novel is underated. More chapters needed! I don't think you “author” are seriously writing this, but I like how light it is.
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Author are you sure that this is a magical realism novel : Well it look like a romantic novel of the female lead side
One of, in my opinion, the best stories on this website. I like the MC even though he is very dry. He cares a lot about the people he surrounds himself with but the way he is written is dry. Read it, it's worth it.
There's no repetative plot going bros. And the story is just on another level. The story is very serious and dark, so thinking that it might have some comedy just pass it, the story progress is great.So, its a great story, must read.
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师兄, 师姐, etc are such easy terms to translate and important but yet they are used as pinyin. Every translator uses the English equivalent. I don't understand the logic of using pinyin. Also, many sects/locations names need to be translated in order to convey the meaning to English readers but sadly they have been kept in pinyin. It results in loosing some of the story which author wants to convey.
Well, the story is good and I love the protagonist. I have read till Ch240 in raws and it's one of my favorite.
I hope the translator would notice this and change certain terms for the benefit of readers.
Especially in the beginning of the novella, let's say the first 50-60 chapters, the writing style was very dry, you could tell that you had no experience. I even wondered if it wasn't generated by artificial intelligence. After that, an undertone began to appear in your writing. But you keep using the main character's name every other sentence...which is very annoying. Use synonyms, speak for him and not in the 3rd person.. there are many options to avoid this annoying repetition. Regarding your writing, in general I like such stories and therefore notice quite a few cons that you could emphasize. The battles are very lean, and the character development is fast-paced. The same goes for the dialogues, which are trite and emotionless…There are also a lot of actions, events that have no logic... such as the watcher, which supposedly cannot be interfered with, and at the beginning it was shown how the contracts under his supervision were secure, but then it turned out that it was not so... which completely contradicts the concept, making this belief absolutely nonsensical. Chapter 291 Revealing The Truth, you say how he wanted to share the responsibility and that's why he trusts gamers he hasn't even seen live. You absolutely trashed your good idea with your organization, you could easily have built it based on mafia organizations or terrorist organizations. Not to mention that there are other secret organizations where they are in different circles. The more you reveal yourself to some, the more vulnerable you become...In order not to ramble on, I'll give some examples where you can see combat mechanics, dialogue, and the ability to keep the reader in suspense. For example Reverend Insanity and Reincarnation Of The Strongest Sword God. Of course even they are only a good attempt compared to true masters of fantasy, such as Steven Erickson or George Martin.