GOOD You are back!!!I really liked your previous work Solo player Arvin... So I anticipate big things from this book too...Don't disappoint me...
Truly a different take on the system— with its setting being in the cultivation world and the designated person as a native cultivator instead of an isekaied person from the modern world. An intriguing topic that I’ll admit. :3There are a few things I would like to mention, but to be perfectly honest, your grammar and spacing is quite good and above average for most of the reviews I’ve given.1. Punctuation: You appear to have fragmented sentences for the sake of smoothness, but I think it would be wise to limit it as readers might find it distasteful ( which doesn’t include me in spite my bunch of corrections since I believe reviewing includes giving advice in comments aside from reviews ). Additionally, quoted sentences sometimes lack a period at the end.I would also add that fragments as well as missing commas before or after ‘-ing’ words as well as after quoted words are the main issue I see as of now. There are some incorrectly spelled words or phrases, but that is few and far in between. ( Also, I would suggest rereading from chapters 1-5 in your novel to look for my comments as you may not be able to see them all from the notifications alone. )2. Show not tell: There were a few instances I wished that the emotions the characters felt were on their face and not stated in words. For example in chapter 2, “Quan Ding who was worried about him checked his pulse to ensure what had happened but came to a shocking realization...” could be altered to “Quan Ding’s brows furrowed in worry as he checked his pale brother’s pulse before uttering in disbelief...”In my opinion, it would spice things up a bit more while also shortening lengthier sentences. All in all, do take my words with a grain of salt and don’t change due to my words if it disrupts your storyline. I think this in itself has promise to be popular in the long run. So keep up the good work, Author !
I am waiting for more :) !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Such a sweet book ??... It truly is well written and is wrapped up really well ... Simply beautiful ❤??... Sweet and short the perfect way for any work
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Good story concept but amarteurish attempt at historical and cultural disambiguation. like I said, good story concept but more needed in plots development and suspense generation
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Hi. HOW's it hanging?Good?Good.Anyway, this'll be a bit different from the typical reincarnation H@rem stuff you'd read about. Why? Because the mc isn't a reincarnation nor an isekaed dude. He's actually- oh wait, that's a spoiler. Moving on, yes, this has 18 stuff and yes this has H@rem in it. However the plot is clearly focused on world domi- ahem- (Oh wait, the title already spoiled that... better pretend like I know nothing...)Feel free to ask me anything you wanna know.
The story until now is very good I can't wait for upcoming chapters it is one of the few novel which I currently reading as I have lost interest in other tons of novel
Hahahahahahahahaha. Last sentence of the synopsis cracked me up!!!Hahahahahahahahaha. Last sentence of the synopsis cracked me up!!!Hahahahahahahahaha. Last sentence of the synopsis cracked me up!!!Hahahahahahahahaha. Last sentence of the synopsis cracked me up!!!
Bagus, ceritanya menarik, apalagi saat membangun kotanya. Mungkin bisa lebih detail bentuk kotanya sperti apa? Jadi lebih pemasaran kelanjutan ceritanya
is the novel racist? please tell me it's not..