Yes, it is really refreshing, there are taboos, there is interest and much more, very pleasant reading and the ms is very pleasing, the author knows how to present, very nice, thank you.
I've read until the first time Ophelia and Mika meet, at the end of the exam.The system is interesting and some sort of non-isekai getting game'd but for Mika.I think there's gonna be some subversion which make this interesting, yet I'm not into much this worldsetting. Still, it has some hook.Gotta say, I'm not into this kind of power-trip "fantasy has to be like an rpg" + HxH tropes, and the writing has problems.First, grammar.Revise it.Second, there's out-of-nothing information dumps or little to no info when things happen, making it kind of dissonant.I'm a mangaka, so I can't give many writing advice beyond *rythm*, and with a story that begins with a mystery, information should be done little by little, and not give spoilers beforehand. Let the reader see that he will win without the narrator telling them when and how before the action happens.Otherly, the descriptions of physical appearances are too much vague. We don't have much info about how it does resemble our world.What is a military uniform in this context? Is it Medieval? Is it Modernist? From were? What kind of robe? What kind of badges?Or the weapons.What's the type of sword the MC has? Is it straight? Is it pointy towards the end? Diamond cross section? Is the cross section maybe hexagonal? Has a fuller? Maybe leaf-shaped?Maybe it's the format of Webnovel that doesn't let authors to put in-between illustrations to give visual information, and it's something that it's seen on the purchased version, which unfortunately, I'm currently unable to have.Still, remind you that even with all the criticism, it has hook and expected subversions of the tropes, so I'm hopeful this arrives to good ports.Good luck and good writing, friend!
For Author’s view only. Rating 3/5:This book is in my library for 2+ months. I started reading but stopped after reading 8 or 9 chapters. I don’t have anything to read now So I gave it a push. I’m the type of reader who says for what it is. I READ A LOT(WN, Kindle, P*treon, Ibook platforms etc). So I believe I have expertise to provide technical comments on books. The book is good(kinda). Well the review is divided into pre 150 and post 150 chapters. The first half is good. The second half started good but it is going downhill real quick. Lots of folks might have mentioned positives but I’m concentrating more on cons of this book. These are my issues with the book. 1.) There is actually no growth in MC skill wise (singing, production etc) meaning he is heavily system reliant. The Author failed to show how the MC is improving by relying on system PLOT ARMOR.2.) For an ex mafia member MC is WAY TOO PASSIVE. I mean at certain point you feel like he is a PUSHOVER. He also acts STUPID. I mean who tells the villain about his impending doom only for villain to rectify it? He might have a SAINT behavior in mafia gang but after spending so many years, he need to have that knack feeling similar to 6th sense. A different author who wrote similar genre book has implemented that 6th sense to the MC really well. If you want I can elaborate on that. We do not want a COLD BLOODED MC but MC who has a genuine head on his shoulder. 3.) Author likes to create too much UNNECESSARY AMATEUR drama. There is no point in creating that UNNECESSARY AMATEUR drama only for MC to come out unscathed. As a reader we like plot progression with main characters personal growth. Not this type of plot progression by creating unnecessary amateur drama only to get resolved few chapters later. Some drama is necessary like the 2 characters from original Joon’s past as it is presented as a necessary thread but the other stuff like the Moon/Xin is UNNECESSARY. This line of writing is predominantly written by asian authors as it gets traction from local populace but from a global WN perspective only certain section of readers stick with book and the other drop the book VERY quickly(I’m also asian BTW). Global audience LOVES DRAMA but the drama should be CREATIVE, TENSE, NAIL BITING. This style of drama is implemented by hundreds of other authors previously and most of those books failed. They wrote 1000+ chapters but all of them are a pile of junk books that folks don’t read. There are ways to rectify the point1 and 3. For point2 I already provided how. If you want to use that 6th sense thing do it subtilely and don’t force implement in a single chapter. Point 1.) In order to make MC less reliant on system, you need to portray MC in a way that he is actually putting some effort like listening to multiple genre music, going through production scores, dabbling with instruments etc. All these things at least on a macro level should be shown to readers. Your goal is for MC to become a top idol. No one becomes top idol if they are messing around and you need to show it.Point 3.) This is kinda difficult to put into words but I will try. June is the face of the book. Not Lin Zhi. Not loufa(White Tiger leader) but June. These Lin Zhi, Loufa, White Tiger gang are categorized as sub drama threads meaning they are just canon fodder drama aspects. The real drama should be how MC struggles to become an Idol like his learning process, how he gets his creative concepts, how he gets new opportunities etc. Audience aspective should be secondary. The primary concern is how he fights to get the limited opportunities as an independent artist. Currently he is in a label but his end goal should be owning his own record label and producing his own songs. I don’t know your thought process but if you want him to become a top idol, at certain point he needs to step out of Korea meaning he needs to become a global star. Honestly speaking, If comparing same genre music there are 100’s of western artists who could wipe the floor skill wise compared to asian artists because hip hop/ pop/ r&b etc are predominantly used in west similar to Basket Ball and Soccer. You can show more drama here by how MC is struggling to break into a global artist. I’ll also join discord(If available). You can ping me over there and you can also reply me here if you read the review.
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Raw Name: 黄金召唤师
Story is okay.
Chapter : 210
Pretty boring..................................................................................
Just.. Stupid..
3 years, nothing happens.. in 3 days the City Lord is trying to kill him..
3 years, nothing happens.. in 3 days the MC's excuse's changes 5 times..
3 years, nothing happens.. in 3 days the MC turns into someone else!?
Bigotry based on nationality. Yay! ......................................................................................
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Amazing book, nice grammer and everything is just incredible!!
Keep up the good work m8!!!
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This novel was surprisingly good. Well written. All the chapters were released at the same time so I wonder when we will get the following chapters? Also, I tried looking for the chinese novel online but it seems this is an original published a few days ago as a book? There is a kindle version for very cheap on amazon. Please go support the author by buying the book so we can more!
Super good book with an interesting storyline. Idk,, lots of people say how they find the system annoying and unreliable but... Iunno man, it amused me. Super underrated book.
This look interesting.
MC teleport in cultivation world with a game which human created to train it's people. it seems gamer can take game items to real world and keep game power in real life.
I wonder how the fk human (Earth) created this?
This novel have quite a lack of logic.
it's up to you guys whatever to you guys like this type of novel.
I don't like this type of story.
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