invisible dragon:(mind) ah fuck its a mistake it fucking hurts
The story is good not so OP mc , good job?
Ahem writing first review, still only three chapters but i support author-san, lets see future update of this novel, excited
Good writing style. Excellent story and nice build of characters.
my favorite story! the author is killin it.
I don't like writing negative reviews, but I sincerely hope you take this criticism well and not personally for future improvement.The main character is a "Mary Sue." Plain as day. Everything goes her way to the point where it's hard to enjoy any development in the story. Spoiler: she can turn food into energy despite being a cyborg and originally having to be recharged. The only obstacle is that she needs to blend into human society, which isn't that much of a challenge because of the amount of tools she has at her disposal.The plot is missing motivation and drive. What is her purpose? Well, it's to save humanity from the evil robots, but why? The only motive she has is because she was formerly a human, but the novel doesn't depict any emotion or drive out of it.Yes, I expected an overpowered MC, but it isn't done in a way that's enjoyable to read. For comparison, the difference between the anime, "The Eminence in Shadow," and this novel is that the MC has a clear description of his goal and how to reach it with obstacles that keep the viewer invested in the development. How? He literally creates his own problems, albeit in a weird way, in order to not only entertain himself but also to further reach his goal, which is to become The Eminence in Shadow (Watch the anime, it'll make sense to you).The grammar is mostly good with some typos.The description of items, environments, and battles are good, but the characters could use some more detail.I will still keep reading to notice any changes, and I would highly suggest an introduction with a proper prologue as well as a rewrite to the first number of chapters.Again, please don't take the criticism personally, I only wish for your improvement.
I'm writing this second review after catching up to the latest chapter of 404. And my opinion on this series has improved! The slice of life elements are less overdone now and actually feel like they contribute to the character development rather than just being there for the sake of being cute or filler. I also appreciate that the main character and most of the side characters are pure good as a opposed to the chaotic good of most other Pancakeswitch protagonists. This also means that unlike most of them, the evolutions of the main characters of this novel are far more positive and good for the world and less demon lord/cosmic horror/eldritch abomination type evolutions and skills. There's nothing wrong oth that, we've just seen it done a lot in Pancakeswitch novels. It's a nice and welcome change of pace in my opinion. Also, despite the fact that this is one of those novels where the game eventually merges with reality, it doesn't go the typical route you've seen many times before. It's a gradual process and there's a lot of mystery as to why it is happening at all. Definitely check this one out!
I have given this novel 40 chapters but it was still not able to grip me, I just don't know how this is a 2nd most popular novel in the rankings, it's super boring and slow
Jadi penasaran dengan kelanjutan ceritanya. . . Semangat terus gan, semoga kisahnya berlanjut dan gak terpotong, semoga makin banyak juga yang baca, .
Once upon a time, there were 3 brothers named Somebody, Nobody, and Crazy. One daySomebody killed Nobody, and Crazy run to the police station and told to the police that "Somebody killed Nobody" and the police asked "Are you Crazy" Crazy answered "Yes I'm Crazy" and he got kicked out.
I am loving the fact how synchronous the language and actions are with setting. The author is giving clear and concise outlines of characters and things in every scene. one thing that I really loved is the smoothness and flow of words. Excellent work. Keep it up. Eager to read more.
no. need. for. reading. the. novel. for. review. the. authors. name. is. enough. to. make. u. read. this.. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .