I enjoyed this story very much but most might not since it takes a long before the fantasy part of the story will start and since English is not the author's first language there might be mistakes but I still enjoy and I hope the author continues to write ??
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Is this story made by a single author? It's more like there's a couple of authors here, taking turns doing each paragraph - with only the vaguest knowledge of what each other is doing. This means there's going to be a beauty introduced every chapter. The protagonist's parents are going to be alive the next, and supposed dead for 3 years the next chapter. Oh, his sibling also regularly changes gender and names. This batch of trial-read has been...utterly terrible.
the feck happened after chapter 120????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????
So basically, This is something one could get addicted to, this is a very enjoyable story that I started to love, everything about it is just ??.Oh and there is much to cover, so the story could go anywhere, love that too
so far I love it, I hope that it gets picked. ???????????????????????????????????????????????
We need to face the bald truth (pun very much intended) that this book is a must-read. See it for yourself, I DARE YOU
This novel really isn't too bad. More specifically, the source material doesn't seem too bad. The problem with this novel is that the translation is below MTL level, it's incoherent and I'm insulted that Webnovel actually allowed this to be released. Nowadays trashy novels get decent translations while the somewhat better ones get abysmal ones. I can't in good faith give this a good score due to the translation quality. 0/5.
horribly translated.........................................................................................................................
The book is quite acceptable, however I will give the author a couple of recommendations... Give more prominence to the mc... The author makes a mistake that all authors of books make. and that is to give much prominence to a secondary pj is very boring to read several chapters of secondary characters and then a few of Mc... I'm not saying that I don't mind a couple of chapters telling the history of the world. The protagonist's past. Or one or another event in the world. However from my opinion that kind of chapters should not exceed the amount of (4), the perfect synchrony would be several chapters of the (Mc) And between 1 and 4 chapters of the past, secondary Pj, events in the world... This is my opinion. The book has a lot of potential simply is to give more prominence to the Mc. Read 10 chapters where there is no progress of the mc is totally boring ... PsdT: English is not my first language so excuse the spelling mistakes.
nice read, I have to say love the nonchalant mc and to say the least it's a nice work in all honesty better than I expected, keep up the good work we're backing you up
A virtual reality novel like this is nicely written, as the characters is quite lively, bringing life to this book. And I think with a little more polishing, this can become quite popular !Here are some issues I want to point out however:1. Grammar: Among some of the grammatical errors were misplaced commas, which created run-on sentences; incorrect verb tenses, which should be past tense due to the way you write most of the verbs, and a few misspellings. Additionally, while correct, I found some sections of the sentence to be redundant ( example from chapter 2– “His friend’s reaction was so strange that he even thought about taking him to a detoxification clinic for help because that reaction was too abnormal.” [ ‘so strange’ & ‘too abnormal’ mean the same thing in this sentence, resulting in redundancy. So I would recommend taking out one or the other ] )Reason why I am saying this is because readers should have a good, first impression of your book. Hopefully my comments may assist you in your journey !2. Info dump: While I personally don’t mind, I do appreciate when writers can spread out information evenly in the chapter without massive info being placed out in front of me. It makes it easier to digest. While info about the game is perfectly fine, I believe the part about the quartet’s appearances could be segmented to when they appear in the story, so that I don’t have to go back to imagine how they look like.Overall, I think this has potential, but it only depends on you, Author.So keep up the good work !