An action packed setup for the four chapters published. Chaotic origin with bad guys showing up (decent forecasting in preceding chapters). Fits a Warfare SciFi-Adventure genre. Writing is easy to read.
Good
Genuinely love the story not alot of pokemon stories thats not about fighting hope it nvr drops ############################################################################################################
Good job.....................................
Good job.....................................
Good job.....................................
Good job.....................................
I think this book is from RRL correct me if im wrong i used to read this exact setting overthere same author?
Start was very interesting. It wasn't so typical but it didn't became somthing weird I must say its worth giving a read
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Ah yes, isekai into the creator's own game.
The grammar and characters have been fleshed out nicely. Your sentence structures are for the most part great! The breaking of the 4th wall is a nice twist and its not abused too which is good.
The only problem I have is the plot. What's Jason and Mo Zuo's end goals? This is his game so he knows everything about it, but what is his purpose? This could very well be explained later, but I just recommend making it clear near the beginning chapters!
If you read her other stories than you'll know the quality of the writing for the diabetes you'll get! ? This couple is introduced from Susus book so if you seen their interactions, you'll know what's coming ?
424 supporting and 600k view, still not get chosen wow lol
It is simply perfect. No unwanted bull—t and dragging dramas. Friendship, sibling love, trust and unconditional love. No white lotuses. Never been so real.
All right I just read the first 40 chapters and all I can say is wow that’s novel is very bad the writing is sixth grade at best, the overall flow makes no sense, as well it’s full of the troubles we’ve come to hate. Please don’t let this not go through I’m gonna do the next 20 but probably won’t reveal.ufffc
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