I stopped for a moment and enjoyed the sensation together with her.
"Hello
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Now the fact that they both have to join hand only then they might!! have a chance to fight against him.
intresting i will add this to may library .
i love it.............................................
When the girl Will notice she been abused? And the nouns até confusing.
Overall your story is great; it’s written well, and the story is interesting. The only suggestion I have would be to have a chapter where all the sci-fi names/machinery are listed and explained (much like how FCS was explained in chapter 14 iirc). Or make guide us into familiarity by allowing us to grasp each new abbreviation before introducing another term.I love sci-fi, but even this was a little hard for me too follow in the later chapters.The scene with the old man and police officer was rather funny; I would’ve commented, but it kept loading!Anyway, will be following this!
Amazing Plot.. I loved the concept so much and your writing style is very easy. I could visualize every scenes and I enjoyed what I saw while reading ( well that's the fun part of reading) Good work, Author!!
Interesting book, with great potential. However there are some cases when the author makes things a bit dizzs to read, but I think he will get better, so read till chap 55.Only after that write your opinions.
The story moves at a steady pace and the MC seems quite caring and likeable. The world background is also well explained. The writing could use some editing, but overall it's shaping up to be an interesting read.
I really appreciate the uniqueness of the MC in this novel. Most books like thia focus on an underdog fighting to make a system more fair to the unlucky who aren't gifted. In contrast, this MC revels in the advantages that the corrupted system gives him over others. Really enjoyable change of pace.