Let's start with your writing quality. Maybe my standards are too high, but your sentences are too long (some parts are honestly unnecessary) and some phrases are misplaced. I suggest you read about grammar rules on misplaced modifiers. You should also edit your usage of punctuations, so you can seperate your long sentences better. You're also somehow using some words wrongly.For example in first chapter:"Is that anyway to talk to me? I remind you that without me you would be nothing!"You can rewrite it as:"Is that how you're supposed to talk to me? Let me remind you, you would be nothing without me!"There are more errors, but I'll move on to the next.Story Development. The reason why he died is because he wanted to end the contract. So they blackmail him, then they kill him and the reason is too shallow-- he wanted to end the contract. Since this is under realistic fiction, he will only be blacklisted at most or more blackmail will be used. To make it better, why don't you add more enmity for the main lead. You also didn't mention how he adjusted and stuff.Character design. It's a bit confusing to read since the personality of other's aren't that distinct. But it's okay. World Background. It's somehow clear. Overall, it's good.
Amazing novel keep up the good work.. No harem please also try getting someone to proofread for you.............................................................................................................................. ......
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My kind of humor and an interesting story. If you can handle minor grammar issues (there/their, your/you’re, lack of commas, ’a lot’ being one word instead of two…) then it is an amazing book worth reading.
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I dropped it but re read, and its interesting- ' life-of-an-emperor-in-the-xianxia-world ', seeing as that was the title I expected someshit like that, you know emperor MC, something different from the young master cliché. And it is, but it isnt exactly that.The MC is an emperor, that shit is new. so nice. not cliché . but he isnt the focus. Like almost 60% of the story till C35 is about his children, the semi antagonist and then MC. he isnt the main focus. plus I expected, reading the title, someshit like MC being an emperor, his past, his rise, him ruling shit like that. but it isnt there. Would be nice if its there in the future as flash back or someshit.The author does describe the WB and the Power system well, its cool.Something which I didnt like was how the antagonist just kept reviving for plot but he dies so its fineThe bk is interesting but would be nice if MC is more focused, other than that its interesting.**: I think this should be in FF section cause most of its elements are other stories.
One day evil will spread in the fictional world as it prevailed in reality hahahaha good novel it was fun frankly, thanks for your hard work the most important thing is that the hero is evil, because it will cover the story Even if it's bad
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i don't really know why those guys are giving this book 1 star like, the book is good! if you don't like it, stop reading it, you're disturbing the new possible readers from reading it! JUST STOP GUYS!!!
interesting story I like the main character so pls continue the story oh and talk more about the background of the main character and what are his powers