Really really good start. First chapter had me on the edge of my seat to figure out what was going on on that bus! Although it was only a nightmare, it’s still a great introduction to the horror aspect, and the true feeling of loneliness that the MC experienced, desperately trying to get ahold of anyone. Loved it so far! I’ll read more when chapters release
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I think the writer needs to work more on this book. as specially the world background. overall it's a good book. ... .. .. .. .... ... . that's all
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Thanks for the update and for the record I have to go to the office and I will be there at baka bawal HAAHHAHA to get the plates and napkins and I will be there at baka
Brilliant work author. Adding a new force huh. In my next life if I'll have to study about this force too, believe me I'll not forget cursing you too. Btw nice to meet Paul, unlike yours my Paul is really in s/m stuff and I can really relate to Julien we think alike especially in football. Anyway about your work, well it's good, I enjoyed, the only complaint from my side is the names of some of the characters, Paul, Julien okay but Alit.... Aldre... see I can't even write those names much less remember or speak. Well it's my problem I think.Anyway, the story is smooth and you have an amazing world building and character designs are pretty good too. There were some grammer issues but since I myself is bad at it so I'm not sure if I can say it's error.All in all a good read and definitely awesome for someone who is into science and for those who are not in science like me, you too should read it, either you'll start loving science or hating it all together. In the end I'll just say dear author please update it more regularly.
This is a beautiful book, I haven't read such creative use of words and an image created so proper for a long time. Surely the Author has mastered his writing technique. A great book to read.
I've just started, but it's very interesting so far! The worldbuilding is great, and I really like the idea of having two elements. The author also does a great job of introducing new characters.There are grammar and tense errors, but in terms of helping the reader visualize what's going on, the writing quality is better than 95% of what's on this site.I'm giving it a 4.6, but with a good copy editor it would easily go up to a 5.
After he gave the gold coins to the old man, the librarian stared greedily at the gold coins for some seconds unable to believe his own eyes, but he quickly adjusted himself and thanked the customer, however, Arthur ignored him, he picked the books and left the building, the old man didn't stop speaking as he shouted at Arthur to come back if he needed any sort of book .'He who is not contented with what he has, would not be contented with what he would like to have' even though the old man got a whopping 220 gold he still wanted more, human greed is really the worst thing in them....Author... just stop...because a business owner trying to get a high paying customer to return is definitely the dangerous and evil greed of humanity... It's not like they're just trying to get enough money that they can live well.Greed only becomes a dangerous trait when the person's demand for something will never be satisfied, and they'll go to any length to try and collect that thing anyway. So if I loved gold, and I could never get enough, and so I ran around killing anyone as long as they had gold. That would be when greed becomes a legitimately negative trait. Did the old man do something like that? No, he's just running a business. Just chill out with the 'humans are inherently evil and disgusting' ****, man. If you're going to try and talk about the greed that humans can hold in their heart, at least think about what's actually happening in the story you're writing first.
today I read ch. 156. I have to say, I really enjoy reading this story. you get a fantastic build protagonist who has a background, not many protagonists have. his thinking and his actions are in line with his characteristics. thanks to the great story telling, you understand the reasons behind certain actions and developments. the quality of the writing is top notch.DEFINITELY A READING RECOMMENDATION
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