A really well thoughtout plot, albeit sometimes slow, it picks up the pace quite quickly. MC is a mix between a Druid and a Necromancer, and the abilities and skilsl he display are interesting.however, the interesting part is the plot itself and how well it is structured, things feel grounded and rather realistic at the same time, while the world is filled with mysterious and many conceptual thingsthe game world is very inspired by D&D, from astral planes to classes, the rpg system itself, and how items and skills interact with one anothermc is growing at a steady pace, but he is cautious and doesnt take things for granted, the whole necromancer and druid system is also very nice, it is not just "get skill level up and done
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I think I can't say much it's a lovely novel, with really good story development and I look forward to read the second book, but u really notice it's not a god translation.
I have no problem with the story quality. It is interesting for me and I can see the passion of the writer. My advice are to not overly use commas in one sentence. Maybe lessen them by making it to another sentence. I also want to suggest to change your dialogues into this "You are amazing," He said in a low voice. (if it was an active convo) but use "You are amazing." He said in a low voice. (If it is the end of convo). Well, good luck! Your novel will reach its success as I see the potential! Kudos! ? peace ✌️ I don't want to be critical though......Have a nice day!
The story progression is very good and I have enjoyed every bit of it. There are not many thing going on at the same time making it easy to understand.
True Reality is simply the existence that was created for Mankind and for everything else. The best we can do is to seek an understanding of this Reality so that we can comply with its dictates.
very interesting story!!!! already read it on faloo till chapter 60 If I could would've read all of it!i want to know more about dust, and how he uses silica.
I want to remind you, editor and translator. if you want to sell this book, please make it readable. for 380 chaps or so is good enough, I even top up for the chaps.But after that, the writing style is suck. even junior schooler is better.
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I like how you outlined your character in a design that would be relatable to your readers. Personally, I love a main character that could make me feel something and that's what made me feel about him. Moreover, as I read through the novel, it was very easy to read, resembling a feel-good novel, the type that would give the readers a sense of relief and belonging, I guess? I've read until chapter 2. Until now, I'm very intrigued at how he will carry out his life in this new world, not to mention, as a janitor. However, some sentences seem off-putting in terms of tenses. I suggest you be consistent with this one as this may distract your readers' attention in the novel. Regardless, to me, they aren't worth mentioning compared to the novel's premise itself. But still, work on them if you want to improve your writing skills further.Overall, it's very interesting. I have already added this to my library and will read this in my free time! Good job, author! :)))
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